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Just an ordinary traveler passing through worlds. Also, an amateur writer with a dream.
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Sep 30, 2021
To:NoahTheReviewer
Honestly, I just wanted to explore the thoughts of characters who aren't the MC lol. Never expected it to be a duality kind of style towards the MC, it just happens the MC got this "duality". I guess you can call it the "Main Character Privilege" at that point lol.
Thank you for the very well-thought criticism! I'm going to be honest with you, I'm struggling a little to find a spot for both Anthony and Catherine. One that would make them stand out apart from the others rather than making them feel like narrators following the main character's life. And don't worry, one of the characters will change their view on the main character. I'm not going to say who, however.
Sep 16, 2021
Thank you for the criticism! I honestly agree with most of your feedback. The characters certainly do feel a little bland. I'm honestly trying to explore to express each characters.
To:Deleted User
Thank you for the comment! I'll be sure to check it out when I find the time!
May 03, 2021
Thank you. I'm glad you're taking a liking to Noel.
Thank you for pointing out the pacing. It certainly does a little slow. I did wanted to make a balance between him in the other world, and him in his home world. I'm still trying to find a barrier between the two, but nonetheless, thank you for this feedback!
I'm still having troubles on defining the characteristics of my main character, Kotaro. I know I want him to be this introverted nerd, but this chapter completely contradicts that.
Thank you for the feedback! I promise the further you read it, the "Restart/Loop" device will make sense. My original plan was to make it ambiguous for readers to keep them interested on why this is happening.
To:Pike
Thank you so much! I was trying to go for a dark-themed magic girl sorta similar to Madoka Magica, but at the same time, having this sense of hope out there. Not sure if that makes sense, but I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Apr 04, 2021
Other than the awkward spacing and grammar errors, I really like the internal struggle you did with Chen Yi. The depression slowly eating him can be reminiscent to people who are struggling just like your main character, and you perfectly displayed it. This is a good start to introduce the main character. Wish there are more to him other than he plays this sport. But nevertheless, keep up the good work!