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RenkoThao

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Just an ordinary traveler passing through worlds. Also, an amateur writer with a dream.

registered at: Apr 02, 2021

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Dec 18, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

I'm glad you like Jennifer as a character. Surprisingly, I thought people would hate her. Look forward to her future developments!

Second Chance At Life

Chapter:23

Dec 18, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

Thank you! I wanted to make Eunice an important part of the story. And yes, Akimitsu is a terrible teacher.

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Chapter:22

Dec 18, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

Lol

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Chapter:21

Dec 18, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

I was trying to aim for a balance between Tsubasa's progression while also dealing with other character's struggle. Regardless, I can see where it's a little too fast.

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Chapter:19

Dec 18, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

I'm glad you're liking Jennifer!

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Chapter:18

Dec 14, 2021

To:Rui

Thank you for taking your time reading my story! I look forward to hearing your thoughts.

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Chapter:1

Dec 11, 2021

Spooky

Something's Not Right

Chapter:2

Dec 11, 2021

Such an ambiguous start. I already like the unsettling atmosphere and tone you are going for.

Something's Not Right

Chapter:1

Nov 29, 2021

Really good intro, it got me intrigued. Made me thought of a soon-to-be rpg adventure for the young hero vibe.

Immortality

Chapter:1

Nov 24, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

I'll definitely keep that in mind. I was a little decisive, wondering if I should explore the thoughts of other characters (who are native in this world, and not reincarnated like the other aforementioned characters in previous chapters), or should I continue with the reincarnated characters' perspective. It was a hard decision all in all.

Second Chance At Life

Chapter:17

Nov 24, 2021

To:NoahTheReviewer

Thank you. I kinda wanted to go for that Shonen vibe in this particular chapter since it follows the third teammate who is with the main character, Tsubasa. I'm glad you feel that way!

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Chapter:16

Nov 16, 2021

I don't know if it's me, but I'm sorta getting some Avatar: The Last Airbender vibes in the next chapters. Like one of the gods is going to start attacking the other gods and declare war. That's just my prediction for the next chapter.

Okay, jokes aside, I'm really loving the introductions of how these gods were once ordinary people, who now became gods.

I became a god!?

Chapter:0

Nov 16, 2021

I'm really liking the main character and the common sense in the situation they have to deal with. I look forward to the direction this story is going for.

SupraNatural

Chapter:1

Nov 16, 2021

I like the melancholy tone you are going for. Some of the issues I think would help your story is obviously the paragraphs structure, and grammar of course (as stated from the prologue). Your paragraphs look a little janky, and difficult to follow. Like when two different characters are talking, be sure to put a paragraph between them to know who is talking. But otherwise, aside from the issues, I still enjoy the atmosphere and tone you are trying to go for. Hopefully, the main character is able to overcome their struggles in future chapters.

Koelynx

Chapter:2

Nov 16, 2021

Interesting start. It's nice and short. Just a little tweeking in the grammar department, and I think your story will be great!

Koelynx

Chapter:0

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