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Aug 06, 2021
To:senpaibaby
Thank you that really means a lot! I've been trying to make everyone's introductions into the story as seamless as possible to give it a more natural flow. I've pretty much established the main cast to the story and am planning now to dive in deeper into each of their characters and personalities. In reference to the spacings in between paragraphs I think that is probably the website because I tried fixing it and nothing changed. But yeah the extra spacing is not intentional, sorry about that if it the story looks off.
Aug 05, 2021
To:Erii
Thanks for the feedback, I've been improving on that as the chapters progress!
To:mikasajean
Thanks! I hope I can keep the chapters at the same level of quality as the story continues!
Aug 04, 2021
Yep! Aoki is meant to seriously make your skin crawl haha
To:cmoneyjr
She very much is
You had a great deal of descriptions when introducing the Clickers and I liked that a lot. It really gave me a good image of them. I'll keep up with this one as I am curious to see what direction this story takes.
Aug 03, 2021
Your character’s voice is awesome! I really enjoy it and it flows so smoothly. I’ll make sure to keep reading!
Thank you very much! I'll make sure to swing over and give yours a read as well!
To:Joe Gold
I've already started reading it and am going to get back to reading more soon. I've enjoyed it so far!
Aug 01, 2021
You got airships, pirates by the sound of it so far and a good set up so far. You have good skills with constructing an image from your writing so I will definitely keep reading!
Jul 31, 2021
The world building you've done so far is interesting. You have set up a pretty unique world that could go in a lot of different directions and even have spin offs. So far I'm liking it so I'll stick with it!
To:znf
Thank you for so much feed back it really helps! Logan's role is pretty big within the story so his personality will most surely smooth out the further I get in it. As for Ava I was trying to show how she is strong willed and headstrong, but still limited by her own shortcomings in a world filled with foes much deadlier than her, hence why she had a short breakdown in chapter 6. I'll keep working on having her character stand out on its own from just following plot points so thank you for bringing that up.
Jul 30, 2021
I really hope this gets continued at some point. There's some good world-building here.
Jul 28, 2021
Glad you like Logan. He's my favorite character with the novel too. Big things to come involving him so stayed tuned!
Jul 26, 2021
Thank you for the input! I've been working on improving the word choice has the story progresses. Glad you enjoyed the first chapter and world so far!
