Jul 18, 2021
The chapter was very adorable! I think it was well deserved break for Lena and Sam. Their interaction felt genuine and it was a relaxing time seeing them banter.
Going forward, I think there are moments where you told rather than showed. I know it's very old and cliche advice to give, but I think there are moments where it could help in your pose.
I also think there were moments where your pacing was too fast. I would have liked a little more time in each location or interaction, rather than feeling like I was jumping from place to place without time to breathe.
Overall, great work and I look forward to reading the next chapter!
