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Always on the grind.
Find me not sleeping at Paints#0155
Jul 18, 2021
To:He'snotevenconscious
You have no idea how much your words mean to me. They are much appreciated and I will make sure to make this series as good as I can.
Thank you for reading!
My compliments to the chef! A very well-polished chapter and consistently so!
Personally, I thought some of your sentences were a bit long and that slowed the action down for me. I think some more shorter sentences might be good for punchier impact, but that's just a thought.
Overall, highly enjoyable read and I'll be eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
Number one this week! Amazing job and well deserved! (Chef's kiss)
Jul 17, 2021
Damn this is getting exciting! Keep writing, mate, I want to see where this goes.
I'm interested to see where the story goes from here. Keep up the good work!
Small complaint, I think you're a bit reliant on onomatopoeia, and as Douglas said, ellipses. I think toning down usage of those two will enhance your prose.
There was a couple of grammar errors to be careful of. I think you should try an external software to help you catch them since they can be tricking to notice in the moment (I've done it so many times myself).
Regardless, I'm excited to see where this goes next. Keep up the good work, mate.
Your characters have a very relaxing and heartfelt feeling to them. This was an enjoyable read and I'm looking forward to seeing more from you.
I'm enjoying the dynamic between your characters and the relationships they are forming. I suggest going forward, please keep an eye on your tenses. You have a lot of present tenses mixed with past tense.
Good job and keep it up!
I could have written more, but I think this summarises my thoughts on the chapter quite eloquently:
HOLY CRAP THAT WAS BRUTAL
Jul 16, 2021
To:boku_no_writer
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Chapter 3 will be out maybe tomorrow or the day after.
To:free.23
Thank you! I'm very humbled and very happy you're enjoying the story!
LEETTTTSSSS GOOOOOOOO
Your writing is consistently visceral and I think you make great cliffhangers.
Keep up the good work, mate!
Now that's how you do a cliffhanger. Keep up the good work!
Keep up at the great work mate, I'm looking forward to upcoming chapters