Jul 16, 2021
I don't know how one manages to make vore so interesting and heartfelt, but damn it, this madman's done it.
I've found the worldbuilding to be consistently enjoyable. The little tidbits here and there really adds to the lore you've created. I'm definitely intrigued to learn more about the history and rules of this society.
The combat had a very satisfying ebb and flow to it. Each move was felt and I appreciate the strategy/methods each character employed in their fight. I do think some of the sentences are rather long and filled with a few too many conjunctions. I'd recommend try throwing in some punchier, shorter sentences to beef up the rhythm of the prose.
Overall, I look forward to the next chapter. The story reminded me of a Post-Apocalyptic, Twisted Wonderland version of Tokyo Ghoul.
Keep it up!
