Aug 01, 2021
This had some really good emotion and detail, your descriptive prose is really one of your stronger points. Dreaming about her brother, imagining her mother, those were all handled very well. I would like a little more concern from Cecilia about the fact that she's apparently seeing things, but it's alright.
Finally, though, we get some real characterization from Anselm, I found her thoughts about him quite interesting, and it makes me, personally, wonder how their contrasting views on the matter of his heritage will come to a head. I'm getting a clearer picture of how Cecilia thinks of Anselm (it doesn't seem like she likes him "that way" just yet) but I'm not quite certain what Anselm thinks of her. As this is told from 1st person that's certainly to be expected, but I imagine that there are some ways we can get a more clear view of how he feels for her, if that's something you're interested in showing us right now. All in all, a very solid chapter.
