Mar 06, 2025
Tampering with the hadron collider is crazy 😭 this guy was up to no good
This chapter really shows the difference in mentality between victor and Abigail. It’s made extremely clear how stark the gap is in their motivations and views. I liked the discourse between them. Abigail knows that victor is up to some funny business but still trusts him because they’re best friends and whatnot. After reading, I get the impression that Victor is almost against his own plans of becoming a transcendent being. But Thats likely because I haven’t seen the other part of him yet—the one who actively pursues transcendence. I’m not sure what he was like before, but he still seems incredibly human. For him to do eventually do a 180 and adopt the demeanor of a being superior to humans, that’d be a bit.. disingenuous? But maybe that’s the point. I just don’t see his ideology reflected in his demeanor as of right now. Not sure if that’s done purposefully or not. He could have some really interesting character progression, if so. I’m looking forward to that.
Actually, that’s a pretty cool way to go about his character. He is aware of his impending rise to superiority and sees it as something that must be done. An absolute. So it makes sense that he thinks “it’s sad that this will happen in the future” while speaking to Abigail.
Another thing. The line breaks in the dialogue, especially around the point where Victor monologues about his plans, are a bit awkward. The small descriptions where his name is repeated a few times are mostly to blame for this I think. They seem unnecessary and it feels weird reading his name so many times in a row.
I still think the contrast between these two characters and being able to see ideas and thoughts bounced back and forth between them is quite interesting. You could really explore that. I’m sure you will.
Excited to see where the story goes from here man. Things are looking pretty nice so far.
