Mar 04, 2025
To:Han Quixote
dude... thank you so, so much. this is like the best feedback ever
first off comparing this to steins gate is CRAZY BRO WHAT HAHA
so here's a little context on the creation of this story:
it was sort of created on a whim. in my past works (which are currently not presentable whatsoever and are also unfinished), i saw a common problem, and it was that they were too quickly paced. it got me thinking, and soon i realized that no actual novel was really like that.
so i wanted to pace this story in a way that gives the reader the feeling that they're reading an actual novel.
clearly i havent been conscientious enough (first chapters were literally eight months ago 😒), but my goal was to make a slow-burner that the reader would really learn to cherish in the end.
you're right about the chapter sequencing. chapter 2 probably would've started here.
if it was a novel.
i've barely scratched the surface of this story, and yet your words do really make sense. i have to take into consideration the fact that there are 4 chapters of, in a sense, mindless wandering. there's probably no point in formatting it in the manner that i do if it just ends up becoming bland. putting those crumbs that incite interest within the reader is definitely the best way to fix this, and thanks to you, ill probably do that.
but idk man. ive always had that fear of "is the reader still here?" and in this story, i wanted to sort of let go of that. but even i can see where you're coming from. maybe its time for the grueling rewriting process ...
