Aug 15, 2022
Congrats on finishing your story!
The only issue I noticed would be the lack of concise descriptions for some characters. Not sure if I just didn't notice them though, so this statement could be invalid. I just decided to imagine what the other characters might look like.
Other than that, this was a pretty fun read. The story was good, it had a lot of impactful moments. It had wholesome moments, sad tragedies, intense fight scenes, funny dialogues, balanced pacing and solid worldbuilding. The concept of the Arq Shards made for a great energy source and served as a decent power system. The villains (Paradise and LX) have some rather wicked ideals, as you can observe how they've ended up ruining the world around the main characters. But you can also see that their soldiers were treated as pawns in the game, where they're pretty much forced to act upon their evil plans. Kind of wish there was a deeper explanation on Adam's distorted morality, but oh well.
Rip Leo.
