Nov 08, 2022
I've just gotta say, I really like your writing style. It's dynamic and individualized and I never had any problems figuring out what was going on (for someone like me whose first-person tends to devolve into play-by-play, it blows me out of the water). I could tell exactly what the main character was like by reading it and there were a lot of unexpected references and jokes that made me laugh out loud.
At the same time, I feel like there's a lot more to this story and this interesting setting that I wanted to see answered. I guess that's the problem when you're working with a limited amount of words. Sometimes it got so criminally horny that it was kind of hard to follow the themes you wanted to present, as well.
That said, great read.