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Jun 23, 2024

As general feedback, consider including more descriptions of their locations to avoid white room syndrom, and maybe add some more sensory details within the scenes.
Unless you chose the dialog heavy style on purpose, then nevermind.

Magical Girl SNAFU - The Fires Of Hell

Chapter:3

Jun 23, 2024

Proper first chapter.

Magical Girl SNAFU - The Fires Of Hell

Chapter:1

Jun 23, 2024

Even for a prolog, there is not much happening here.
No mention of their powers or real look back at the antagonist... just some mild sparing and the emtnion that the antagonist is now in the deepest jail cell.
But I guess most people skip prologs anyway.

Magical Girl SNAFU - The Fires Of Hell

Chapter:0

Jun 19, 2024

You would have gotten me, had I not spoiled myself by reading the comments.

A Date in Spring

Chapter:1

Jun 14, 2024

Cute ending.
Interesting choice to switch to the counselor for the epilog.
It kinda read like almost a semi third person pov for me.
But yeah, I guess it works better to have a more objective narrator here.

Sincere Pretenses

Chapter:4

Jun 12, 2024

To:Steward McOy

Sad panda.
I was refering to 'chickens with ties'.

Sincere Pretenses

Chapter:1

Jun 12, 2024

Rubber chicken, eh?

Sincere Pretenses

Chapter:3

Jun 12, 2024

Yeah, this chapter gave me some Kaguya vibes too.

Sincere Pretenses

Chapter:2

Jun 12, 2024

That are some dangerous games the two of them are playing.
Good thing this isn't a *cough* well dressed fowl *cough*.

Sincere Pretenses

Chapter:1

Jun 05, 2024

Ah, yes, the classic backpack switch.
Too bad the gun owner wasn't russian and it wasn't fired during the story, but I guess one can't have everything.

Was pretty enjoyable, and I might slowly warm up to present tense.

When the Rose Blooms Among the Cherry Blossoms, The Thorns Aren’t As Dangerous As the Petals in the Breeze

Chapter:1

May 02, 2024

To:Kirb

Sure, though I've lately been more of a binge reader, so I might take a while to pick it up.