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I've decided that now is the time to write my first story. Above all, let's have fun on this journey!

registered at: Jun 02, 2023

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Jun 07, 2023

To:ryba

Aomori is definitely on my bucket list, hope I've sparked your interest in it as well.

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:6

Jun 07, 2023

To:HVM

Thanks for the tip! I've added an extra empty line.

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:2

Jun 07, 2023

To:A. Hoshino

These two chapters I've just read are already a big improvement over what I read in the beginning. There are more line breaks, the dialogue flows smoothly, the descriptions are relevant, etc. For now I don't have any real critiques.

The Isle of the Forgotten

Chapter:5

Jun 07, 2023

And he's already redeemed himself! You love to see it. These past few chapters have hooked me, looking forward to the continuation.

The Isle of the Forgotten

Chapter:6

Jun 07, 2023

I'm liking this dynamic, I hope the boy pulls himself together sooner or later. Love the new cover art by the way!

The Isle of the Forgotten

Chapter:5

Jun 07, 2023

I keep thinking of Ya Boy Kongming while reading this.

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:4

Jun 07, 2023

That "I hate you as well" had me in stitches. Love the comedy in this so far!

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:3

Jun 07, 2023

I love how the style of narration matches the protagonist's way of speaking. At first I thought that was just the way you write. 😅

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2023

To:A. Hoshino

Thank you for the continued support! Alicia is definitely not to be messed with, and Oliver's perception of her doesn't help either.

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:4

Jun 07, 2023

Kiyoshi is her WHAT? Nice cliffhanger!

Cursed Lines

Chapter:2

Jun 07, 2023

That was quite a strong reaction to not getting any Valentine's chocolate!

Cursed Lines

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2023

They fell asleep together, in the same bed, on the first day?? This chapter already has more romantic developments than I have planned for the whole novel 😆

Soulmates of loneliness

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2023

To:ryba

I don't think he expected his ordinary life to get turned on its head like that, but perhaps he welcomes the action for a change.

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:2

Jun 06, 2023

To:Aeolian

If grandma weren't so old she would've single-handedly ended the story in chapter 1, I can tell you that much!

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:3

Jun 06, 2023

To:Kitsune

I've been considering either cutting out chapter 4 alltogether or moving it to after they've left the village to pace the story better. The next arc will start soon!

On the run with a witch from another world

Chapter:4

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