Jul 03, 2023
To:yahallo
I'm too busy to co-write at the moment, but I'm totally flattered by the offer!! 🤗 I also think co-writing miiiight cause a bit of a problem with the contest rules 🤣 so if you're writing mostly for the contest, I'd be careful about bringing any co-authors on board as that might disqualify your entry.
If you're newer to writing and would like some advice, I'm happy to offer that! I'm not a professor by any means, but I'll try! 😂
To answer your questions:
(1) As for getting ideas, this is usually a very personal thing that varies from author to author. What kind of romance stories do you like to read/watch? Do you have a couple or pairing that just makes you so excited they appear on screen? Look for what excites you in stories!! 🤩
(2) As for the writing (on a technical side) the sentence structure flows well, and I didn't see any typos or major grammar issues. You use consistent third-person voice in past tense, and the paragraph breaks and dialogue quotes are nicely defined. From a technical standpoint I can't really fault anything! It's nicely done.
The only thing I could point out might be nitpicking, which is just to use a few less synonyms. For instance, instead of "15 minutes elapsed" use "15 minutes passed." The word 'passed' is more common, but it feels natural. There's a few other moments like that where I feel like you switched out words to have more variety (which is good!!) but ended up using uncommon words that make the sentence feel stiff.
But again, that's very minor nitpicking. Rather than focus on the technical structure, I think finding a story direction that you like would be priority~! 👍
