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Jan 20, 2019

Looking great! :p

Twinfaced

Chapter:2

Jan 18, 2019

The introduction of this novel took me back a bit.
I honestly thought this was a professional Japanese novel which has just been translated!

The introduction is crazy! Wow, I respect your writing skills, you managed to draw me in with just four words! :D

Keep up the good work, and remember descriptions of places and chracters are desired by most readers :p (I'm talking about the latest chapter.)

BON APPETIT! Gourmet Battle Girls

Chapter:1

Jan 18, 2019

I love it, the description of characters really draw me in, "green eyes." was it and I gained interest in the character. I suggest spacing out each sentence or at least into three sentences, as it makes it easier for the reader to read through.

BUT!!!!

You are doing well, great start to your writing journey! :D

Twinfaced

Chapter:2

Dec 25, 2018

keep going :P

Dead Soul Dispersia-Triwrite .version

Chapter:1

Dec 01, 2018

Your Idea is like a diamond as I mentioned before! :) Also you worked on the clearness of your writing ;)

I can see the ideas rush into your head and your trying to turn it into words as quick as possible while making sure it makes sense, maybe just double check the sentences you write. As our minds can trick us...By the way the military academy is a great concept and his grandfather brings a a sense mystery and excitement. I hope more people notice your novel in the future so you can get an anime :P

Angel of Death

Chapter:2

Dec 01, 2018

I love the concept of your novel, for me it was slightly hard to stay focused, probably because I'm an idiot. so don't worry, one thing I might say is when you write you want to imagine that with each word you are hooking in your reader like a hook on a fishing rod. Keep putting bait on the hook and keep a firm grip on the handle :) But honestly I love military genres, if this was a manga I would be hooked straight away, I think!

Angel of Death

Chapter:1

Nov 24, 2018

The beginning part got to me, I like the story :)

Ai no shiki: 4 seasons of love

Chapter:1

Nov 22, 2018

I liked the intro, I was captivated, which is good. The way you was descriptive with transformation was awesome, but as I'm picky...One thing would be the logic behind them, I think it's important to know the character and what their goal is earlier rather than later. (For bad characters.) I mean I think you've got a great story but just wanted to have more a impact to readers.

Parable of the Renegades [BETA Version]

Chapter:0

Nov 22, 2018

Kou that lucky...I think you introduced the main character in a good way, I liked the balance between comedy and the informative approach you used. :)

Hopespring

Chapter:1

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