Apr 26, 2024

Author's Commentary #7:

Time to talk about Chapter 7: A new look.
This chapter came to be after I decided the Escape Witch would be a darker and more story driven series than originally planned. Originally, the series was going to be more lighthearted and episodic and essentially be just Madoka and co get kidnapped by the villain of the week and have to escape. However, the main reason I decided to make the series darker, was Fujiko.

I'll elaborate a bit more on that as the story progresses. For now, I'll just give a basic bio on Fujiko.

山口 富姫子 (Yamaguchi Fujiko) is how her name is spelled in kanji.
富姫子 means "wealthy", "princess", and "young".
Her surname, 山口 means "mountains" and "opening".

Her birthday is March 15th, which is known as the Ides of March and the day Julius Caesar was assassinated.

The biggest inspiration behind her character was Otoya Takechi from Akuma no Riddle. Since I was watching that anime at the time of writing Escape Witch, it ended up having some influence on a few of the characters. Yumeko (Tsurutsuru) was not one of them, however.

山口 夢虹 (つるつる) (Yamaguchi Yumeko (Tsurutsuru)) is how her name and nickname would be written in Japanese.
Her name, 夢虹, means "dream" and "discord", while her nickname, つるつる, means smooth which is fitting since she's bald.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

Her birthday is September 13th which is Bald is beautiful day, as well as Niles Thorndyke's birthday, though he was chosen to have that day be his birthday due to it also being the day I uploaded the first chapter of The Yowie Hunt.

In the original, Yumeko actually had medium-length brunette hair styled in pigtails. She also has that style in the Spice of life remake as well. As for why she's bald, Fujiko shaved her and destroyed all her hair follicles All joking aside, I'll elaborate more on these two as the story progresses since I don't want to spoil things. The same goes for both Bianka, Kurobane, and Mochi.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 26, 2024

Author's Commentary #15:

Time to talk about Chapter 15: Taste test.
The point of this chapter was mainly to once again stress the point that in this series, the taste of the dish is what truly decides how good it is. However, sometimes bias can corrupt taste, which is why Rika hatched this plan to see if Makihara would call her food delicious if he assumed Masaru made it.

Funnily enough, this chapter could have been considered a filler chapter in the original, however, despite largely being the same content-wise as the original, it will now serve more of a purpose as buildup for the next mini-arc in the next two chapters. The only thing I'll say regarding that is pay attention to what Helga said, and expect to see more Sundae. Speaking of Helga, let's talk about her.

ヘルガ・ヘップバーン (Helga Hepburn) is how her name would be written in katakana. She's actually half-Japanese and was raised by her father's parents. Her hair is naturally white and she looks and sounds almost identical to Mimi's old teammate and lover, Hylda.

Her birthday is on August 13th which is also Obon. She is 18 years old and was in the same graduating class as Rika and Masaru.

Her favorite food is filet-mignon.

As you've probably started to notice, Mimi is beginning to bring out the good in Helga. Perhaps she will be what ultimately causes Helga to get on better terms with Rika. I won't say any more than that. For the next few chapters, things will deviate from the original so look forward to that.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 25, 2024

Author's Commentary #14:

Time to talk about Chapter 14: Karaoke night.
This chapter underwent a major change from its original counterpart. That being that Jester no longer appears here and Murr Mantis makes his debut here. Murr Mantis was originally debuted in Chapter 40 of the original Spice of life, but I decided to have him debut earlier here for reasons I'll elaborate more on in a future commentary. All I'll say for now is that he is based off of both Darth Maul and General Grievous from Star Wars as well as Black Mantis from Spy Kyoushitsu. Another big change between this and the original is that this chapter better introduces the fact that Waki is also an ex-assassin like Rika. Speaking of which, let's discuss her.

加勢川 和希 (Kasegawa Waki) is how her name is spelled in kanji. Her first name, 和希, means "harmony" and "wish", while her surname, 加勢川, means "to add", "power", and "river".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).
Her birthday is September 9th, which is National wiener schnitzel day. The reason I chose this is because wiener schnitzels are similar to tonkatsu, which is Waki's favorite food.

As for why Waki is so loyal to Rika, and why she has a crush on Matcha, all that will be revealed in future chapters. Though I will mention that before Waki changed up her image, she used to have pale skin and long dark hair that reached her ankles, and was far less sociable. Believe it or not though, she is actually based off Nao Sadatsuka from Shokugeki no Soma. Though funnily enough, looks more like Ikumi Mito, also from Shokugeki no Soma, after her makeover, aside from the mohawk of course. The gyaru-like act she put on back in Chapters 12 and 13 was actually a suggestion by Rika in order to stand out and trick Makihara into thinking that she was actually Rika in disguise. In the original, that was done because Rika was actually disguised as the shy and timid Hinari, and because proving to Makihara that Waki was not Rika deflated his ego and made him unlikely to suspect anyone else of being Rika in disguise. In this version, the reason was mainly to further humiliate Makihara and make him look more like an idiot. I originally intended to have her always talk and act like a gyaru, but ended up scrapping that idea.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 25, 2024

Author's Commentary #6:

Time to talk about Chapter 6: The day Yuni met Reika.
Unlike the original chapter, this one is a bit darker as it delves into what Yuni's mother, Fubuki, went through while she was held captive by Illumous. Despite not properly witnessing the entire ordeal, Fubuki believed her first child was killed due to both the pain she felt from Akuma shoving his sharp fingernails into her, and the fact that she saw the body of an infant shortly after.

Due to this, Fubuki's womb was damaged and she constantly had miscarriages after. As for how she was getting pregnant, her partner left her a fridge filled with nothing but his sperm, mainly because he was paranoid something might happen to him because of the work he did with Fubuki. Though one day, Fubuki was able to get pregnant, and eventually give birth to Yuni on February 1st, 2004.

Now allow me to elaborate a bit more on Yuni's birthday. The reason I chose it was due to February 1st being able to be written as the fraction, 2/1. Yeah, believe it or not, that's why I chose the date. Now let's talk a bit more about Reika.

湯詰 怜佳 (Yuzume Reika) is how her name is spelled in kanji. Her first name, 怜佳, means "wise" and "beautiful", which is fitting since she was one of the smartest characters in the series. Her surname, 湯詰, means "hot spring" and "investigate".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

Her birthday is January 5th which is also the date the first chapter of Detective Conan released.

As for Fubuki, Fubuki Dakota is merely an alias she uses. フブキダコタ (Fubuki Dakota) is how it would be written in Japanese. I'll elaborate more on her in a future commentary. For now, I'll just mention that she truly is a journalist, but has merely been labeled a conspiracy theorist thanks to Illumous' influence. She is also the only person in the world to have a worldwide gag-order issued against her. As for what such an order is, it requires law enforcement to always gag Fubuki first when detaining her to prevent her from "spouting nonsense". This also proves that what Fubuki says is true as Illumous is attempting to have her gagged not because she spouts nonsense, but because they fear what she'll say and expose about them.

One final thing I'll mention is that both Reika and Fubuki appear in both Spice of life and Mystery ghost foresight. As for the latter, it was originally going to serve as the means for telling how Yuni came to live with her aunt. As for why Fubuki wanted to become a journalist, it all started when she capturing footage of a murder on her camera while she was still in highschool. She sent the evidence to the police, however, when no action became of it, and one of the victims of the murder continued to be falsely labeled as the killer by the media, Fubuki resolved to become a journalist to expose the corruption herself. She actually nearly lost her will to live after the incident with Akuma and became inactive until she gave birth to Yuni. It was Yuni's birth that reinvigorated her strength stronger than ever and gave her more reason to rid the world of corruption so future generations could live in harmony.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 25, 2024

Author's Commentary #62:

Time to talk about Chapter 62: Turning point.
This chapter is brutal for both us and Mimoko. This chapter was inspired by a fight that took place in Yu-Gi-Oh! between Katsuya (Joey) and Yami Marik. As such, this means Mimoko lost the match even though she hasn't officially been declared the loser yet in the story.

This chapter actually went through various drafts before the final product. The first reason for that being the very opponent Mimoko fought against, Elijah Johnson. Elijah was mainly inspired by Albert Yamada from Classroom of the elite. Originally, he was going to simply just be one of the piece of shit's hired hands, but also secretly be a grandmaster, which is why Mimoko would have to fight him. One draft even had Mimoko would win before collapsing like she did at the end of this chapter. However, the main reason I abandoned the plan and decided to go with the piece of shit's men actually being proxies completely controlled by him was because I wanted all the hate to be directed at the piece of shit, rather than Elijah.

I felt having Elijah be the one to beat up Mimoko would direct all the hate away from the piece of shit. However, if Elijah was simply a soulless proxy for the piece of shit, all the hate would remain on him. Thus, the idea to make all the piece of shit's men proxies came to be. Now let's give a brief bio on Elijah

イライジャ・ジョンソン (Elijah Johnson) is how his name would be written in katakana. As mentioned in the chapter, he had a rough life growing up, but managed to turn it around when he took up boxing. However, the leader of the gang he was apart of decided to drag him back to the world of crime, though hit an unexpected surprise when the piece of shit just happened to be in the area scouting for new proxies. The piece of shit then sweet talked the boss into letting him fight Elijah and have him become his new proxy should he lose to him. The boss agreed, however, neither him nor Elijah knew the match would be a DESPER chess match, and as a result, Elijah lost. The boss actually felt guilty about that, but felt completely powerless to stop the piece of shit, and since he didn't know that DESPERs couldn't be used in rapid succession, he allowed the piece of shit to leave, rather than trying to fight him.

His birthday is January 16th which he shares with Albert Yamada from Classroom of the elite.

As for Elijah's favorite chess piece, it is the king, since that's the piece of shit's favorite piece and the piece of shit is in full control of all his proxies. However, the piece of shit would claim that the favorite piece of all his proxies is the pawn, since that's all they are to him.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 24, 2024

Author's Commentary #5:

Time to discuss Chapter 5: Dining at Ryokoma.
This chapter was not in the original initially, but added in retrospectively. In the remake however, it is present at launch. The reason the chapter was retroactively added to the original was due to me adding Escape Witch characters to Spice of life and wanting to do the same in Escape Witch. Most notably, I wanted to reference the fact that Madoka is know as the crepe goddess due to how many crepes she eats.

As previously mentioned, this is the same Rika and Ryokoma from Spice of life. Believe it or not, Rika was actually planned to be a character in Escape Witch long before I wrote Spice of life. However, she would have instead owned an Italian style restaurant and been closer in age to the main cast. Her name was also going to be Rina, which funnily enough, ended up being the name of a character in a completely different novel.

Now if you're also reading my Spice of life remake and author commentaries there, you'll know that I'm listing the favorite food of all the major characters. Since all the Escape Witch characters here appear in Spice of life, the favorite foods they have here are the same there. As for the favorite foods, Madoka's is crepes, Yuni's is fried chicken, notably Col Masaru's fried chicken, Emeri's is unadon, and Serika's is takoyaki. Reika's was also mentioned as being honey pancakes.

As for the bit about Serika and Yuni first meeting at Ryokoma and getting in a fight, that originated from Spice of life, which led me to retroactively reference it in the original. Chapter 98 of the original Spice of life contains the incident. The chapter will also be present in the Spice of life remake as well, but it will likely take months before it's published if I continue with daily updates for that series.

One other interesting thing I'll mention is that both Yuni and Serika worked part-time at Ryokoma back when they were both in school. They weren't working part-time at the same time though due to them not getting along well with each other.

Finally, the other Spice of life characters that cameoed here were Mimi, Zuina, and Matcha. Matcha's the most interesting of the three because of her relationship to some characters that will debut in the next arc.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 24, 2024

Author's Commentary #13:

Time to talk about Chapter 13: Waki's teachings.
In the original, this chapter was titled "When it hits the fan" in reference to the phrase, "When shit hits the fan". Obviously this was done because of Makihara's big shit, but first let's talk about the big change between this chapter and the original that I've been hyping up. That major change being... That Rika no longer infiltrates Tabemono disguised as Hinari.

I ended up changing this for a multitude of reasons, the main one being I didn't want Rika to actually be present there and helping everyone out, as I felt ut cheapened the victory. I still wanted to keep the illusion that Waki was Rika in disguise though, which is why I included the bit of Dastard setting up a camera so Rika could watch events unfold.

Since Rika no longer infiltrates Tabemono gakuin disguised as Hinari, this also means Hinari's character has been rewritten. As such, Hinari won't appear until much later, though her role will fundamentally be similar to what it was in the original.

Now let's go over some of the references before discussing Makihara. The judges are all named in reference to certain characters with the exception of Kiki, Helga, and Sundae. However,Sundae is actually based on the character, Urara Kawashima from Shokugeki no Soma. Kanryusai is a reference to Takeda Kanryu from Rurouni Kenshin, who in turn is based off the historical figure, Takeda Kanryusai. Finally, Etsuya is an obvious reference To Etsuya Eizan from Shokugeki no Soma. Now onto Makihara.

牧原 信志 (Makihara Shinji) is how his name is spelled in kanji.
His name, 信志 means "faith" and "aspiration", while his surname, 牧原 means "pasture" and "origin".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me.

His birthday is May 10th which he shares with Azami Nakiri from Shokugeki no Soma. This is fitting since Azami was the primary inspiration behind Makihara's character.

His favorite food is gourmet wagyu, as he believes wagyu is the core of gourmet meat dishes.

As for his big shit, the idea stemmed from me wondering what would ave happened in Shokugeki no Soma if someone decided to put laxatives in their dish as a middle finger to the judges. Speaking of which, the mochi surprise dish was originally not named in the original until much later, however, in the remake I felt it was best to establish the dish early, which is why it was first mentioned in Chapter 1.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 24, 2024

Author's Commentary #61:

The time has come to talk about Chapter 61: Proxy.
This is the big twist of the arc. All of the piece of shit's goons are nothing but soulless proxies for him, meaning he's essentially fighting everyone through them. This actually was hinted at in the last chapter if you paid close attention to the stakes of the match. I can also confirm that the question Okisato asked Peter back in Chapter 53 was regarding if the piece of shit could assume full control over his goons.

I originally did plan for the goons not to be proxies, but opted against it, since I wanted all the hate and anger the readers would feel reading this arc to be directed at the piece of shit. This statement will become a bit clearer in the next chapter, though. As such, I will elaborate more in the commentary for that chapter.

Now I'll talk a bit about the two proxies, Rudolph Kristof and Igor Abdulov.
First off, ルドルフ・クリストフ (Rudolph Kristof) is how his name is spelled in katakana. As stated in the chapter, Rudolph used to be a humble tour guide before the piece of shit found him and beat him in a DESPER match and had him murder his family. His birthday is December 24th, which is Christmas eve and fitting considering he shares his name with Rudolph the red-nosed reindeer.

Igor on the other hand was a scientist working under Tsar Grigori. Since he failed to produce results, the tsar ordered him to become a guinea pig instead which led to him getting buffed up and turned into a proxy for the piece of shit.
И́горь Абдулов (Igor Abdulov) is how his name would be spelled in Russian while イゴール・アブドゥロフ (Igor Abdulov) is how his name would be written in katakana.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

His birthday is January 3rd. Since I chose the date at random, there's no real significance behind it.

As for both Rudolph and Igor's favorite chess pieces, it is the king, since that's the piece of shit's favorite piece and the piece of shit is in full control of all his proxies. However, the piece of shit would claim that the favorite piece of all his proxies is the pawn, since that's all they are to him.

One final thing I'll mention is that Numakawa's an idiot. In fact, this chapter will truly mark the beginning of the "Numakawa's an idiot" era, so look forward to facepalming more when Numakawa's on screen.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 23, 2024

Author's Commentary #12:

Time to talk about Chapter 12: The remedial course.
Funnily enough, aside from Mimi being present, this chapter is largely the same as the original, at least word-wise. That big change I hyped up in the last commentary is actually in effect, though it won't be properly revealed until the next chapter, so feel free to speculate on what it is.

Now that Itsuki's part of the main cast, let's discuss more about her.
牧原 五生 (Makihara Itsuki) is how her name is spelled in kanji.
五生 means "five" and "raw". I chose this name both to reference the character Itsuki draws her name from, Itsuki Nakano from the Quintessential Quintuplets, and Gordon Ramsay who is know for shouting "RAW".
牧原 means "pasture" and "origin".

Her birthday is February 9th which is actually National pizza day. The reason for being that Itsuki's favorite food is Pizza. She just can't resist the flavor of it and believes it to be a true culinary masterpiece.

Finally, let's end things off by talking about Matcha, who first appeared back in Chapter 1. 名智 抹茶 (Myouchi Matcha) is how her name is spelled in kanji.
抹茶 means "to erase" and "tea", while 名智 means "reputation" and "wise".
She was obviously named in reference of matcha tea which is why her hair is also green. As for her surname, it's actually the same as Mochi's and Purin's from Escape Witch. Perhaps there's a connection between them.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

Her birthday is May 2nd which is is national matcha day, and while she does enjoy drinking matcha tea, her favorite food is actually yakisoba.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 23, 2024

Author's Commentary #4:

Buwahahaha! The time has come to discuss Chapter 4: Jester's explosive crepe factory.
Believe it or not, the whole reason this chapter came to be was because I wanted to introduce Emeri in it before the next major arc began. Originally, Emeri was going to be introduced in the third major arc, but I wanted her to be introduced before the second arc so she could be a part of it, and thus, I created this chapter. Now let's talk more about Emeri herself.

倉守 英芽里 (Kuramori Emeri) is how her name is spalled in kanji.
英芽里 means "excellence", "sprout", and "village" , but can also mean "beautiful" which Emeri certainly is. 倉守 means "warehouse" and "protect". Originally, Emeri was going to be a hikkikomori living in a heavily fortified house, but I decided to make her Madoka's cousin and have her live in the Ginkawa mansion instead. She is incredibly shy though which is why she wears a helmet and prefers to go by the alias, Rolly Polly (ローリー・ポリー in Japanese) in public. The Rolly Polly name is actually in reference to pill bugs which roll up into a ball.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

Her birthday is July 25th and she is 21 years old. There was no significance behind it, I just chose it at random. Though since Emeri is older than Madoka, she tends to act as an older sister to her, and is often the voice of reason in the Ginkawa household.

As for Emeri's love of motorcycles, it actually came to be after she visited the arcade at Ryokoma back when she was in school and played a motorcycle arcade game against one of Ryokoma's owners. This was also the start of her wearing the helmet in public. Speaking of Ryokoma, it is the very same Ryokoma from Spice of life, meaning this story takes place after the events of Spice of life as Spice of life took place in 2016 while this story takes place in 2023. This means that some Spice of life characters will cameo in the next chapter, so look forward to that.

Now before we end, let's talk about Edo's greatest evil daimyo, JESTER! Obviously, he's a comedic villain and embodies the spirit of Team Rocket from Pokemon. ジェスター is how his name would be spelled in Japanese, and speaking of which, I attempted to do a Japanese translation of Jester's themesong. Fair warning, since I used Google translate, there's probably a bunch of errors, but here's the Japanese version of Jester's themesong.
ヨヨイ！ 俺は江戸の奥から来た最大の犯罪者です。俺は組織犯罪界の大物です。誰もが私の名を恐れています！ 俺が成し遂げた残虐行為はすべて！ 殺人！ 誘拐！暴行! 麻薬密輸！ 誰もできません 我が力に匹敵せよ！ 盗難！戦争犯罪! さあ、皆、我が怒りを恐れよ！彼らはピエロは愚か者だと言います。さて、今誰が笑ってるの、バカ？ララララ。俺は悪で、卑劣で、邪悪で、非人道的で、暗黒忍術大名-おおおおおおおおおお。よおお！
[Yoyoi! Ore wa Edo no oku kara kita saidai no hanzai-shadesu. Ore wa soshiki hanzai-kai no ōmonodesu. Daremoga watashi no na o osorete imasu! Ore ga nashitogeta zangyaku kōi wa subete! Satsujin! Yūkai! Bōkō! Mayaku mitsuyu! Dare mo dekimasen waga chikara ni hitteki seyo! Tōnan! Sensō hanzai! Sā, kai, waga ikari o osoreyo! Karera wa piero wa orokamonoda to iimasu. Sate, ima dare ga waratteru no, baka? Rararara Ore-sama wa aku de, hiretsude, jaaku de, hijindōteki de, ankoku ninjutsu daimyō ōo ō ōo ō. Yo ō]

As for how his themesong actually sounds, it sounds similar to Master Kohgha's theme from The Legend of Zelda series. Speaking of which, Master Kohga was the biggest influence behind his character along with Don Kanoji from Bleach and Captain Buggy from One piece.

As for his birthday, its April 1st, April Fool's Day. Iori from En Passant Grandmaster also shares this birthday with him, but the two have no relationship to each other whatsoever.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 23, 2024

Author's Commentary #60:

Time to discuss Chapter 60: Gameplan.
First off, there wasn't a lot shown on what everyone discussed in the hotel room. That was a deliberate decision, though I plan to reveal what was discussed as the chess boxing match progresses.

Speaking of which, Chess boxing was actually one of the big things I wanted to be in the story along with the bughouse match. For those who don't know, Chess boxing is a sport where combatants alternate between boxing and playing chess each round. Victory is achieved via a KO or checkmate. In the event of a draw in chess, the decision goes to boxing. If there's still a tie when the round's over, whomever has the most points over both rounds is the winner. However, if there's still a tie there, black wins.

The main reason I'm pointing this out is because the piece of shit and his team are all playing as black while the chess club team is playing as white. Speaking of the piece of shit's henchmen, I'll discuss them more in detail once the fighting begins. Though I will say that one of the goons, is actually a clever reference to one of my other works. See if you can guess it before it's revealed.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 23, 2024

I definitely did not expect and Ekko backstory immediately after the speech. I'm interested to learn more about her and how she got off her pills.

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Apr 22, 2024

Author's Commentary #11:

Time to talk about Chapter 11: On the fly cook-off.
Originally, this was the 7th chapter in the original Spice of life and took place right after Rika rescued Mimi from the cryogenics lab. Aside from Mimi now being a part of the cast at this point in the story and working at Ryokoma, there isn't much difference between this and the original.

In the original, Dastard mainly helped Rika due to it solely giving him the opportunity to infiltrate Tabemono gakuin. While that is his primary motive for doing it here as well, he's more willing to do it as a favor due to him already being reunited with Mimi here.

As for the chapter itself, I had a lot of fun writing it and having Makihara get sabotaged by Dastard. Speaking of which, I guess I'll clarify that the reason the turkey was salty was because Dastard pissed on it. As for the bread, he simply swapped it out with old bread.

Finally, before I give a brief bio on Masaru, I'll mention that while the next few chapters will be similar to their original counterparts, there will be a major change in the story from the original that will shake things up a bit. Now let's talk about Masaru.

稜之 優 (Ryono Masaru) is how his name is spelled in kanji.
優 means "superiority", while 稜之 means "peak" and "to reach".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

As I'm sure you already know, his birthday is April 12th and he shares it with Rika. The two were actually born at the same time as well.

His favorite food is funnel cake. Originally, he had no favorite preference for food, but after trying the funnel cake, he just couldn't stop eating it despite being initially repulsed by its sight. As such, Rika frequently makes them for him, much to her pleasure.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 22, 2024

Author's Commentary #3:

Time to talk about Chapter 3: The unbeatable escape room Part 3.
When I first wrote the chapter, I was surprised at how quickly Madoka and Yuni ended up escaping. Thus I decided to use the opportunity to introduce some other characters before the chapter ended.

First up is Serika Midoriya. She's 21 years old and has hated Yuni ever since they first got in a fight with each other at a restaurant back when they were both in school. Serika is also indebted to Reika, which also led to her hostility towards Yuni growing worse when Reika took her on as a partner instead of her.
緑谷 芹佳 (Midoriya Serika) is how her name is spelled in kanji.
Her first name, 芹佳, means "celery" and "beautiful". This is why Madoka called her an "oversized twig of celery". 緑谷 means "green" and "valley", which is fitting since Serika has green hair.

Speaking of Serika's hair, she now has natural magenta highlights, whereas in the original, she did not.

Her birthday is August 31st. I actually chose this date at random, so there isn't much significance behind why that's her birthday.

I'll also go over Nakajima as well. Mutsumi Nakajima is 27-years old and desperately searching for a boyfriend. In the original draft, I made this trait about her more upfront, but decided to tone it back in rewrites.
中嶋 六実 (Nakajima Mutsumi) is how her nae is spelled in kanji.
六実 means "six" and "sincerity" while 中嶋 means "inside" and "island".
(If I made any mistakes with the translation, feel free to correct me).

Her birthday is June 27th. Like Serika's, there isn't much meaning behind the date, though the date 6/27 could reference the fact that Mutsumi's name means "six" and that she's 27 years old.

As for Bianka, I'll talk about her more in a future commentary.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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Apr 22, 2024

To:Taylor J

Pretty much. It's also fitting considering hunger is a characteristic of the zanni character from Commedia dell'arte (Italian comedy).

When I originally wrote Zanni's character, I only named him after the zanni because of the mask he wore. After doing some retrospective research, however, I found he bore more similarities to the zanni than I thought. As such, his entire character can be considered a reference to the zanni of Commedia dell'arte rather than just the mask.

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