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Saika

Hello Everyone! I'm a lover of all things horror, and can't go a day without writing or reading! My dream is to be a published author, so hopefully being on Honeyfeed will help. Thanks in advance for reading my work!

registered at: Oct 08, 2023

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May 09, 2026

To:Mara

Thank you for writing it. I'm going to try finishing it today or tomorrow!

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Chapter:1

May 09, 2026

To:Isoruku D. Envar

I hear ya, but try to do it in a way that makes sense. You made it clear that Kaito is really smart, and observes things all the time. It doesn't make sense that he'd forget about his encounter with the shadow, the crack in the coffee shop, or how he lost time in Sato's apartment. I'm still rooting for you, though. Keep it up!

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:10

May 09, 2026

To:Isoruku D. Envar

You're welcome, and thank you for bringing this amazing story to life. I know time isn't on your side right now, but I really believe you'll go far here. I haven't read all of the other horror entries, but I haven't seen anyone else come up with something like this yet. Don't give up, and keep going!

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:16

May 08, 2026

This is one of the tropes that I have a love/hate relationship with. Farah could save us all some time, and just tell Yuna everything. But that would be too easy lol!

Echoes

Chapter:6

May 08, 2026

That's...one way to make a new friend? I couldn't relax during the safety pin scene. You did a great job!

Echoes

Chapter:5

May 08, 2026

This is starting to remind me of a movie I watched as a kid. And I love the inclusion of the Heian poetry. Yuna and Xiaolin are really cute together!

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Chapter:4

May 08, 2026

How is supposed to stay away from her roommate? That's going to be impossible!

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Chapter:3

May 08, 2026

I love the atmosphere. Everyone feels distinct, and the watch is a nice way to add to the tension!

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Chapter:2

May 08, 2026

This is a great start. I can't wait to see how the rest of the story goes!

Echoes

Chapter:1

May 08, 2026

To:Taylorclone

Welcome back. I hope you like it!

My Family Tree is Filled with Thorns

Chapter:5

May 08, 2026

Let me start by saying that I still like the story, and want to continue reading it because I know the ending will be worth it.

But it feels like you're repeating things way too much. Kaito and co already learned all this several chapters ago. The Pattern messes with the mind and any electronics recording it.

You said in the last chapter that Ishida stopped arguing, but he's doing it here. You've already established a great concept, but you're also lagging and pushing at the same time. You've built the tension, and set the stakes. The mystery is solid. Try reading what you already wrote, give it another go of formatting/editing, and work from there.

You've caught my interest, and kept my attention. You've got everything you need to finish strong. I believe in you. Keep going!

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:16

May 08, 2026

I like the direction, but this feels like it would do better with a time-skip warning. Why were they in a hospital at the start of the chapter when they weren't working in one before?

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:14

May 08, 2026

Alright. Three things.

1. Your math isn't mathing. You have time lapses that are longer than three minutes.

2. Kaito keeps acting like he knows what's going on the second someone asks the right question.

3. OF COURSE ISHIDA WAS EXPOSED. WHAT ELSE WAS GOING TO HAPPEN AFTER HE TRIGGERED THE LAPSE?

I can't tell if Kaito is losing his mind or being played. I like where the story is going, but it's a little late for him to be worried about his team's safety. The only one who hasn't been touched is Ami, and there's a chance just looking at the code will be her downfall. Keep up the good work!

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:12

May 08, 2026

Didn't he already let it in once?

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:10

May 08, 2026

The flashback feels like you just gave away something that should have been saved till the end.

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:9