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Hello Everyone! I'm a lover of all things horror, and can't go a day without writing or reading! My dream is to be a published author, so hopefully being on Honeyfeed will help. Thanks in advance for reading my work!
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Oct 14, 2023
This was awesome! Having Eros be the one to comfort her, and help give her a reason to live was wonderful! I did see a couple of typos, but this story really stands out!
The plot was good, but there are several typos like character names, and sentences not being capitalized. The pov switches are also a bit confusing, because there's no visual indicator like extra spaces to help show it. The ending was also very good, and it's also refreshing to see a sibling play the role of Thanatos instead of a lover. Good job!
I agree with Glitch, but I did enjoy the twist ending. He didn't give up, and she didn't become his Thanatos despite him having similar feelings. It's a shame we can't have more chapters, because I would love to see more of this version. Very well done!
The line "embrace the night life" reminds me of a vampire manga/anime. Call of the Night. This was a very good read!
Oct 13, 2023
To:Raynad
Thank you for writing it. I honestly didn't see the truth about his girlfriend coming, so I think it's very good.
The ending really ties everything together, but the mc's actions were strange for the most part. I know grief makes us do things we wouldn't normally do, but his imagination feels compulsive. He loved her so much his mind tricked him into "meeting" her again. It's very interesting.
I loved the twist at the end linking it back to the source material! Very well done!
It feels like I'm reading a mix between a poem, and one of the classic fantasy stories. The world felt alive, but I do wish we knew what happened to Emily. It feels like there's supposed to be more, but very well done!
Oct 10, 2023
It should be illegal to end on a cliffhanger that good! I really enjoyed the story so far. I did notice that some words are written in the wrong tense, and there are typos in every chapter. But the plot is amazing! If you get a beta reader, or give yourself time to read it with fresh eyes, then you could catch the typos! I look forward to seeing how Max and his friends deal with the monster, or die trying.
So, the monster can attack people outside of the friend group. Very interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next!
One down! This chapter was really great, but putting more space between scenes, and pov switches would have made it easier to read. Very well done!
To:SamSerakawa
Thank you for writing it. Good luck with the contest!
Oct 09, 2023
This was so good! I could see the source material through your work clearly. It's a wonderful bittersweet type of story. Very well done!
Thank you very much! For some reason, that was the first idea that came to mind. After reading and watching the music videos.
Oct 08, 2023
And just like that, Max has become a true horror mc. Ignore the obvious signs and will soon pay the price! I love it!
