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Aug 26, 2025

To:nathaishik

Hence the seinen tag I see

Minichi Time

Chapter:2

Aug 26, 2025

To:nathaishik

Vocalist/guitarist?? Now you're speaking my language

Minichi Time

Chapter:1

Aug 26, 2025

Ok sorry if I'm using this chapter as a bit of a critim dump, but I just wanted to offer some advice. First off, one thing that stood out to me (and tends to stand out to judges too) is how much "breathing room" your prose has. For this chapter specifically, I noticed that a lot of the dialogue gets lost in the sauce. Giving the dialogue more space by separating the paragraphs would really help with readability and make it a more enjoyable read overall.

Another thing I noticed is that there's a bit of "telling" instead of "showing" ("she did this" or "they did that") which, to be honest, is something I struggled with when I first started writing too. I would say instead of just saying "they arrived in this town" or "they grabbed food," you could convey those things through something like dialogue. Good ol' reading should do the trick for learning this one!

Anyway, I hope I didn't come off too harsh with this. Keep up the good work, and I'll try to read more when I get the chance (tho that might be a little tricky with work and my own entry). I'll def get to it eventually!!

Minichi Time

Chapter:3

Aug 26, 2025

Holy that escalated so fast I was hoping the wholesome family reunion moment would stew in my head a little longer 😭

Minichi Time

Chapter:2

Aug 26, 2025

Oh hi, 'tis me, your resident shorky. Sorry I just got to your story! Work has been beating the crap out of me 💀

Anyway, we've got Bukodan and truck-kun, so certified banger already (but guitarist doko 😢) Curious to see how you'll combine music+magic!

Minichi Time

Chapter:1

Aug 16, 2025

To:Stoneflew

This chapter is what you get when you make a SOL whore write a doomsday story

(...ty for the kind comment :3)

I Prolonged the World’s Demise by Babysitting a Kaiju

Chapter:25

Aug 12, 2025

To:nathaishik

I suffer from a very serious condition where I'm incapable of ignoring any girl band content. So yeah, no pressure at all :DDD