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Aug 23, 2025

You change tenses mid-sentence a lot in this chapter dude!
It made it a little confusing to read.
Story and plot wise: I like it, and Zephyra's already proven herself to be fun to read about.
But from a technical standpoint, there's polishing that needs to be done; I'm only saying this because I want this story to be as good as possible.

The Heracle's Diary - My Story in Another World

Chapter:10

Aug 21, 2025

To:RedPen

I hope you enjoy the rest of the book! I’ve worked really hard on it.

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:3

Aug 20, 2025

To quote the pinnacle of writing (Minecraft: Story Mode):
“Coolio.”
I’ll have to read more later.
Thank you for the engaging story; I hope this ends beautifully.

The Heracle's Diary - My Story in Another World

Chapter:9

Aug 20, 2025

*Jeopardy buzzer noise*
…
I hate it when I’m right sometimes.
That’s the problem with people though; death.
If only there was a way to have someone who would never die as a friend; someone who would listen when you talked and give you comfort when there was none.
I hope Sora finds someone like that.
Otherwise he might experience what C.S. Lewis called the death of the heart (it’s a lovely quote from him talking about how to never break your heart again).

The Heracle's Diary - My Story in Another World

Chapter:8

Aug 20, 2025

If Zeno doesn’t die, I’ll question everything I know about writing.
Also, while I understand that Sora’s life wasn’t anything special and that he says it felt hollow, life is life.
And it’s always a gift, even the parts that stink.
And even the parts that no one remembers or cares about; because really…
Everything matters.
Good show so far; let’s see how it continues.

The Heracle's Diary - My Story in Another World

Chapter:6

Aug 20, 2025

I really like your opening! I’ll have to check this out more later (I will say that I don’t like ecchi though, so my mileage with this story might not be the greatest).
I know this’ll sound odd, but I appreciate you giving us your MC’s name in the first chapter it gives me something to latch onto.
Keep up the good work!

The Heracle's Diary - My Story in Another World

Chapter:0

Aug 20, 2025

To:Ramen-sensei

Thank you so much for your kind words and actions! I appreciate them very much and hope you'll enjoy the rest of this novel as much as I enjoy writing it!

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:8

Aug 20, 2025

Cool; having a whole class get Isekai’d gives our MC a starting crew (unless they all perish of course).
I just wonder how he’s going to convince anyone to join him if he’s not seductive or heroic…
Maybe I’ll find out when I read more of this in my free time.
Keep up the good work!

Piracy In Another World: I Will Plunder The System

Chapter:1

Aug 20, 2025

Nice premise! Golems are cool.
I just wish I knew the MC’s name!
Maybe I’ll read this in my free time once I have more of it.
Keep up the good work.

Reincarnated as a Golem: I'm Stronger than Most!

Chapter:1

Aug 18, 2025

To quote one the 'best' shows of all time...
"Nice use of violence." ~Prof. Caraway, High Guardian Spice
I hope you do well! Keep up the good work.

Kingdoms of Sin: The Hero Is Dead

Chapter:1

Aug 18, 2025

Interesting.
I like your premise and title and art.
At the moment I'm not going to read the rest; it'll sit on my library until I have more time.
I will say; if you read your story out loud, you can tell where some parts feel clunky or uneven-I do it with mine and it helps a lot.
I do like how you opened with the question of what makes a hero though.
That is a good question.

I Killed the Hero

Chapter:0

Aug 14, 2025

To:my mage

Thank you so much for your inspiring words! I’ve done my l best to deliver a challenging and uplifting story that I hope you’ll enjoy. Feel free to comment on my later chapters as well!

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:1

Aug 14, 2025

To:my mage

Thank you so much for your inspiring words! I’ve done my l best to deliver a challenging and uplifting story that I hope you’ll enjoy. Feel free to comment on my later chapters as well!

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:1

Aug 12, 2025

To:Nato_otan1

Thank you for noticing! I put a lot of effort into pressing Ctrl+C and Ctrl+V on church history.

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:5

Aug 12, 2025

To:Nato_otan1

Thank you for noticing! I put a lot of effort into pressing Ctrl+C and Ctrl+V on church history.

The Great Priest is an Atheist?!

Chapter:5

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