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Feb 17, 2026

To:Crys Meer

I was so distracted with the physical assault that I forgot about that, lol

I Hate Dating Shows So I Joined One to Ruin It!

Chapter:1

Feb 17, 2026

(You asked for critique in chat.)
I can't speak too deeply about the words themselves. Your grammar looks good, and I can see personality in your writing.

Your spacing is interesting. Many sentences are just their own paragraphs when, traditionally, they might be pooled together. From what I know, paragraphs are defined as one set theme. If it's all about, say, describing a place, that can all be in one paragraph.
Then again, you're not the only one I've seen with this quirk, so maybe it just falls down to preference.
I also don't fully understand why it sometimes goes to italics. Some of those I recognize as thoughts, but others make it seem like Astro is in a flashback. Maybe that's just a style choice? It's not like it's a bad thing, but I'd be careful if you ever did want to put in a flashback (maybe have those be in bold if you do add them?).

EmBarking Into Love

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2026

This chapter hit me right in the depression.

I Wanna Tell You About My Schizo Friends But I'm Not Sure They'll Let Me

Chapter:0

Feb 16, 2026

Him getting punched was funnier than it should have been.
And with that attitude, he kind of deserved it.

I Hate Dating Shows So I Joined One to Ruin It!

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2026

I think it'd be hilarious if Aunt Sayang did, in fact, have cameras and just casually brings them up into conversation later.
"Oh, you got home rather late last night."
"H-how do you know that?"
"The cameras don't lie, sweetie."

The Wolf-Demon of Sloth is Trying to Ruin My Life, So I'll Turn Her Into a Housewife

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2026

This is unhinged in the most chaotic way possible.

JAB★CROSS★CHECKMATE

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2026

*Screams in binary*

Destroyers: Your Touch or Oblivion

Chapter:0

Feb 16, 2026

"What the fluff?!"
I'm using that.

Melody: The Phantom Thief

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2026

Eita, first rule of fiction: if you're the only one acknowledging someone, they probably don't see her.
Amateur mistake.
(Also, he seems like a compassionate guy, and I respect that.)