Feb 17, 2026
(You asked for critique in chat.)
I can't speak too deeply about the words themselves. Your grammar looks good, and I can see personality in your writing.
Your spacing is interesting. Many sentences are just their own paragraphs when, traditionally, they might be pooled together. From what I know, paragraphs are defined as one set theme. If it's all about, say, describing a place, that can all be in one paragraph.
Then again, you're not the only one I've seen with this quirk, so maybe it just falls down to preference.
I also don't fully understand why it sometimes goes to italics. Some of those I recognize as thoughts, but others make it seem like Astro is in a flashback. Maybe that's just a style choice? It's not like it's a bad thing, but I'd be careful if you ever did want to put in a flashback (maybe have those be in bold if you do add them?).