Apr 27, 2025
Brother, I won't lie, I sometimes feel like you're just skipping so much connective tissue that I need to reread a couple times before I can piece together what happened. It's fine to take your time and expand on the scene, even if that means going over the word count. It also helps *grounding* the chaos before you dive too deep into it. A lot of the time you just fling the reader into the fray and give them no tools to understand what's going on. At least an explanation would be nice.
Another thing I keep noticing is the formatting. If a sentence starts with a specific name, then that's who the reader thinks is speaking, or will speak. So if you say:
"Stop right there!" Amelia turns to Carter.
"To the rafters!"
Then Amelia says the first line, and someone else says the second.
