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May 08, 2025

banger

Caelum et al.

Chapter:1

May 07, 2025

bro out there letting those diamond cutters hang

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:10

May 07, 2025

Is there a flashback jampacked in the middle of this chapter? If so, the transition is very jarring, though I can appreciate that might be on purpose. If it's not a flashback, then I'm at a loss.

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:8

May 07, 2025

I'm not gonna dogpile on the Japanese comment, instead I'm going to comment on the way you structure your prose. Whilst I get the idea that you're essentially translating your mental image into words, that process is hardly seamless, and it becomes distracting. For instance, when you broke away from the Ikiryo talking to explain what she was, I could envision it as one of those breakaway manga panels that write out the explanation in textboxes. And whilst that may work in manga, all it does in writing is break up the pace.

Another thing is that there isn't too much sense of personal progress in here; this is almost a filler chapter. Sure, we see Sakuya exorcising a spirit, but that's not exactly bringing up new information. We know she's a spirit exorcist, we know how she gets when she fights spirits, we know how voracious the spirits she fights are. If anything, it would've been interesting to see her start to fail a bit in her duties here because she keeps thinking of Jumo. That way, you would have an additional, more internal layer to the conflict, as well as a new element that dovetails nicely from the plot progression

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:7

May 07, 2025

You have a refreshingly forward way of writing romance hahaha. No roundabouts, just raw emotion. And that bit at the end, was that a yokai's perspective perchance?

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:6

May 07, 2025

Tbh, it's a little distracting to revisit the same habits and structures so often. The pink scooter and the food are two (one insignificant, one noticeable) that we don't really need a rehash of. It feels like dwelling on them just for the sake of showcasing things from two different perspectives is, somewhat ironically, making them appear less important.

Also the fact that Sakuya still wants to help Jumo even with a broken foot is peak innocent dummy behaviour.

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:5

May 07, 2025

Those tatami mats must be smelling like Nigeria by now

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Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions

Chapter:4

May 06, 2025

To:Steward McOy

The first person tends to help with these passages, mostly because it's more entertaining, partly because *Asami* is entertaining.

As for possibilities, well... this is one of the books I'll probably rewrite at some point, following a more robust outline, whilst injecting a bit more lighthearted moments into the melodrama. I do want to challenge myself to write something that's not always '''heavy'''. But suffice it to say that there were other things I wanted to add that I couldn't about Asami's catgirl condition (i.e. she has paw pads on her feet, she grows more fur during the winter, sometimes when she's distracted she walks on her tiptoes, etc.)

As for Anna and Takuya, yeah... they are made to be bigots at the outset. I have some redemption plans for them, but reading how my inspiration series handled them... maybe it's best they stay unredeemed.

Thanks for reading, Stew. It means a lot. Until next time~

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:28

May 06, 2025

To:Ashley

good anime

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:28

May 04, 2025

To:Steward McOy

Now, wait until the next chapter drops

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:26

May 03, 2025

To:Cashew Cocoa

Now wait until the chapter after next.

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:25

May 03, 2025

Initially, this was all one chapter. But since it's well underway to passing the 3k word mark, here you get the most logical split. Think of it as Sunbeam - 3.1

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:26

May 03, 2025

To:sameeeee

Go write now (haunting your comment section now)

I Prolonged the World’s Demise by Babysitting a Kaiju

Chapter:32

May 03, 2025

To:Ashley

Because the noun is spelled with a c and the verb with an s?

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:23

May 03, 2025

To:Steward McOy

Anything she can do to comply with plausible deniability if it all goes tits up (which, let's face it, all non-catgirl led initiatives will)

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:23