Apr 04, 2025

Oh my god it's legally distinct team rocket and their buizel/weezing clone (I think). Tbh, I like how Kichi finally managed to get her foot in the door and win a battle. Even if most of what she brute-forced her way through; I want to imagine she just learnt body slam out of memory.

Still, very fun :3

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Apr 04, 2025

God, I could go for a bite of Himicch- I meant Kichi. I mean what.

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Apr 04, 2025

ISEKAI'D BY THE TREE STUMP INTO A PICH- I mean a Himich- I mean a Kichi. And found by a cheeto-fingering, nose-picking, honey-seeking runt. Amazing. If this were me - and I totally didn't write a fanfic like this which I promptly deleted out of shame - I would've just stolen his wallet.

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Apr 04, 2025

Nidlord... That FR/LG opening screen... Cyan instead of Blue... You truly are a walking reference post...

One thing to ask is whether this Hemingwayan way of sentence structuring is intentional? I get the intent may be to be brisk with the prose, but the side effect is that it reads a bit dull after a while...

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Apr 04, 2025

Write more pls.

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Apr 04, 2025

Sun kablooie!!!

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Apr 04, 2025

I would strongly advise revisiting this chapter and fixing up the formatting.

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Apr 04, 2025

LittlePoop... the censorship got to you...

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Apr 03, 2025

To:Steward McOy

What? Where...

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Mar 31, 2025

Stupid fucking gremlins.

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Mar 31, 2025

I was promised catgirls.

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Mar 29, 2025

What.

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Mar 20, 2025

One thing to note is that, whilst I absolutely love the dialogue, it feels like a lot of characters share the same affectation. So far both Kael and Cynthia seem to speak with the same kind of rhythm and cadence. I can imagine that suggests some closeness between them, but I'm wary of it not being an isolated incident.

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Mar 20, 2025

Man's suave like the dawn is bright, I love this pompous twink

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Mar 18, 2025

I'll kill myself before the extirpations get to me!

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