Sep 15, 2021

I wasn't really trying to make people think she was evil, so that's fine. I definitely played up the suspicions with Eve, but I hoped that no one would really suspect her due to how sweet she was to everyone.

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Sep 15, 2021

Elly gonna hurt...

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Sep 15, 2021

I'm not sure either, I wasn't trying that hard to hide it.

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Sep 15, 2021

The title does also apply to Eve...

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Sep 15, 2021

Insert adventurer like you joke.

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Sep 15, 2021

Rio's lover was Damien, I thought that I had made that clear enough, but I guess it could have been more overt.

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Sep 15, 2021

Without his POV, though, he would do nothing until he enters the plot later and we wouldn't know him at all.

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Sep 15, 2021

Some people need to be called out though.

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Sep 15, 2021

He does.

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Sep 15, 2021

I didn't say better.

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Sep 15, 2021

Sabine still getting casually dunked on is a mood.

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Sep 15, 2021

I know, writing Blake is so cringe sometimes.

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Sep 15, 2021

I feel like Sabine's situation wouldn't be fully gathered without the trial chapters, though, which might hurt her sympathy. I'm not sure if Elly knowing the full details of Sabine's situation before making her decision would be proper for her characterization, though.

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Sep 15, 2021

Don't worry, that's coming next. I suppose I could split the next chapter in two, and put this one between the two parts if you think that would help with pacing...

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Sep 15, 2021

They don't contribute much to Elly's development, but I thought that skipping the trial might not do well for Sabine's development.

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