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Workaholic

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Jul 19, 2021

Just my personal opinion, but starting really early with a heavy chapter risks scaring/turning off potential fans/readers away or make it difficult to really appreciate this important point. I feel the impact would have been more powerful if you introduced this chapter later in the series (especially since you explain in subsequent chapters counter arguements to the concerns our favorite truck-kun operator endures).

TRUCK-KUN

Chapter:2

Jul 19, 2021

I will say your cover for this book (to me personally) is more interesting even though your other book is much more intriguing.

The Curse of Immortality

Chapter:0

Jul 19, 2021

This work really reminds me of a webcomic I enjoyed reading called unordinary (a lot of similarities). Only thing I would caution on is it would be great to not make Zeya’s power development a sort of plot armor that stories like these are prone to. Going from shape shifting her own blood to being able to control another person’s (who is significantly heavier) in one fight without prior training or experience without some sort of drawback (even though she had help in the fight/trains with mom and she did get battered in the fight). I look forward to your next chapter

Karma

Chapter:4

Jul 19, 2021

A nice heartwarming chapter that does a fine job of piquing my interest. What I really am curious about is if “Dad” knows of mom’s power and the daughter’s power despite both being officially “powerless”. Minor grammatical edit, I “thrust” (you wrote trust) myself to aim my shinai towards her upper body.

Karma

Chapter:2

Jul 19, 2021

I love the premise of the novel and your first chapter. assuming the large space is for impact, I feel the large block of space for the final word is beyond overkill for readers who read this wonderful work on a phone or tablet (especially for just 1 word). I personally think it would have been better (both impact and display) to reveal it in the next chapter, reduce the space block to 2 or 3 lines or perhaps express it artistically (what comes to mind is the word itself written in the liquid as an image). But it’s an intriguing opening

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Chapter:1

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