Oct 11, 2021
I can feel some kind of inspiration from Frankenstein reading this. Not sure if that was intentional or not but either way it really establishes the themes you are seem to be aiming for.
The description of the scene is really efficient in its execution. It works really well to give the reader an image in their head with very few words being needed.
Another thing I've noticed is your use of lexis. The creepy, sinister mood really is emphasised by it all. "reverberate", "ominous", "shadows", "frigid" they all really add to that atmosphere, and that eerie depiction of some dimly-lit laboratory.
Overall, really good start. I shall hopefully try to read more at some point. You've got me hooked right by the lead, so well done in that, I would suppose.
Anyways, I shall say goodbye and hopefully we will meet again in the comments. Thank you for your time.