Jan 30, 2022
To:otkrlj
Thank you for this and a ton.
I had a feeling the accents were a bit strong, and I hope to eventually tone it down if I am to get round to making a rewrite.
When it comes to the poetic style, I'm unsure really whether that's due to the overall poem-like structure, or the style of text itself. Honestly, the reason the structure looks like it does is due to a visual error in the editor that I tried to fix manually.
Additionally, on your point regarding perspective. I've been told before to use third person and I am just unsure how to translate the anecdote style of narration to third person. I could definitely experiment, once again when I try to make a rewrite, but that's an area I may struggle in.
Nonetheless, I am extremely grateful for this, it's been a grand help and I'll make sure to keep it all in mind.