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Jan 05, 2023

Ohhh, that contest novel pacing kinda kicking in here😅 - Lotta stuff packed in to a suddenly longer chapter - Totally understandable but does sort of make the pacing feel a bit wierd this chapter ya know?
I also think the format of the novel is a bit off too - I think the pay offs would hit alot harder if camp had been a week long or some such.
As is, they die in a bus, then spend a few hours playing in a woods and sparkly cave - Now they're all in the gooeey gooey love phase😅 - I suppose its all thanks to cupid sheinanigans but would feel more impactful if they had more time together👍👍

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Chapter:38

Jan 05, 2023

Its a small thing but i think the number of students on the camping trip is an oversight - Its constantly sounds like our gang of 8 our just a small group amongst many but, like, 5 cabins or 4 people each is only 20 kids - Almost half the kids going missing would be noticed😅😅

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Chapter:36

Jan 02, 2023

To:Makech

Oh man, that would be the most chad way to end things ever😂😂😂😂😂

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Chapter:34

Jan 02, 2023

Well damnnnnnnnnn, watch out for dodgy tunnels in future I guess Ren....😅

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Chapter:34

Jan 02, 2023

Man, things didn't even say secret for a full 24hours😂 - If everyonr knows the secret, then is it still a secret....😉😆👀

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Chapter:33

Dec 31, 2022

Not to sound like the grinch of Christmas😅 but I am glad there is something a bit more substantial in these kids pasts - Don't get me wrong, what happened to Rika and Julious is tramuatic for them no doubth, but not exactly mind boggling stuff ya know - Glad we have some variety in the types of trauma?😅😅.

I think in general the story has been a bit, safe ya know? Its comfy reading, well written but pretty predictable - Not a bad thing just my current vibe so far.
Looking foward to getting a bit deeper into their characters😄

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Chapter:32

Dec 31, 2022

Ehhhh now this is what we need, give me those juicy details😅 - Poor Rika🤥

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Chapter:29

Dec 29, 2022

I really like have the whole gang together, they bounce off each other in really fun ways.

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"He didn't hate it" o.o rough ro😅

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What what time period is this? No phones? Were the phones confiscated i guess? But there surely no signel up here so why bother?
Kids these days, never carrying a torch smh

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Chapter:27

Dec 28, 2022

Naw, don't tease us like that, i wanted a good punch up :c

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Chapter:25

Dec 28, 2022

I like the idea Adam just stood there giving off emo vibes while he waited😅😅

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Chapter:23

Dec 27, 2022

Skipped a litte ahead as i wanted to make sure i read the xmas chapter before new year😅😊 - Glad i did, these holiday themed speical are fun and a nice mood lift for my current predicament😊👍.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:191

Dec 27, 2022

Not much comments this week as ive got a pretty bad flu😢, apologies.

That said the city seems really interesting, espcially the idea of layers - Are there any sketches or such like for it? Sounds awesome😄😊

Creation: The Path of a God

Chapter:80

Dec 27, 2022

To:Creation

Sounds good to me, i look foward to seeing more of my boi wiliam❤️😄

Creation: The Path of a God

Chapter:76

Dec 26, 2022

Man what a trip - My gead burns😅, that feels like a real cop out of a comment after coming so far, so trust me when i say i shall return and post a proper review, perhaps on one of the sites with a review tab.

I do have some qualms on this last stretch but am just not all that with it right now🤥.

Overall tho I've really enjoyed this journey and amma miss these crazy idiots😊

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:57

Dec 26, 2022

To:Ochroleucous

I'm not a great reader while sick, but if i dont do something other than watch tv, amma go insane😅👍👍

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:55

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