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This is the former home of some of my novels, you can find them these days over on RoyalRoad!

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Feb 20, 2023

Oh man this is my kinda of chapter - If your gonna have sentient weapons then making them tragic figures is a must!
Espically the one weapon dyaing farewell, thats honestly kinda heartbreaking- Great chapter😊😍

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:198

Feb 19, 2023

Man this chapter hurts yo, i want my boi to be a happy gywn again😢😭

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:197

Feb 19, 2023

What a chapter title 😎😂

Red-Black Course

Chapter:30

Feb 18, 2023

Mitch!!!!! My boiiiiii!!!!!

And cuasual Durara reference is nice too😄.

I also like him not seeing that telltale drunk signs were missing, though doesn't help Mitch's intelligence stat that he a barkeeper, didn't notice😂😂

Red-Black Course

Chapter:28

Feb 17, 2023

Ehyo, congrats on the 10k views😄 - Time for me to start volumr 2!😊😁

Red-Black Course

Chapter:27

Feb 12, 2023

Man its nice to be back in the flow of this story - Also good choice starting with more from our bois friends and Noriko, great way to get the plot rolling and also remind us who everyone is😄😎

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:27

Feb 10, 2023

Love a heavyily physical fight like this😄 - Man its been one good fight after the next and we still gotta save the mayor!

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:196

Feb 10, 2023

Oh, I thought I'd fallen behind but I guess not😅🤣.

Good chapter, I love Trancrid more by the minute, arsen won't stop him scouting the scene!!

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:195

Jan 18, 2023

This isn't going all that well for the gang, though pretty awesome finishing/desperation move from Fiona😄.

I fear for their lives (and limbs) as the 1st act seems close to its end😭

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:193

Jan 18, 2023

That title is a low blow man, a low blow😭.

Small technical thing, but I'd add something like '***' or such like after Nero falls off the balcony - Just something to give the audience a little sliever of hope that Hal has won before you summarily crush our feelings😅😭👍

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:190

Jan 17, 2023

Man poor Odells crown😭, and that fall sounded painful to, our bois being made to grow up fast😭

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:189

Jan 15, 2023

To:F.C Fondness

I'm afraid I'm pretty much gone from the website uploads wise, and I'm mostly reading elsewhere now - Still I'm here for people like yourself, I wanna see where books like this one go after all😄 - Volume 2 looks exciting😊💪

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:26

Jan 14, 2023

A volume 2!!!!!!! Nani!!!!!!!!!😄

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:26

Jan 09, 2023

Interesting city, I thibk in a few places you slightly over explain - I'd presume everyone in the audience will know the value of having food stalls on campus without an explaination😉😊.

The merchandis for Vasilera is cute and humourus, though i do wonder what it suggests about this city-states production capabilities, higher tech level then medieval perhaps? 🤔👍

Creation: The Path of a God

Chapter:82

Jan 06, 2023

My probably last contest novel on the list complete - And what more fitting of a book to finish on than the winner😄.

And I should add, just like congratulations in general - You wrote a cohesive book in a short time with great art, that fits the brief and is alot of fun + You won😄😊.

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As a book I would of liked to see more, a version where the camp is a week long and we get to more deeply know the cast without having to sort of rush a bit near the end.
I guess I'd like to see one of Cupids other attmpts at the experiment😅😂.
But I wouldn't necessarily take that as a negative, the fact I've come to the end and want more is argueble a great success!
And I appreciate how you went with an inclosed story too, its wholesomely conclusive😊.

I think your cast of characters are really lovable with great dynamics - That said I do think both the cast and story are a tad simple - I'm not sure if thats a bad thing or anything, but ya, nothing really surprised me, you could even kinda guess the tramuas to some degree - It isn't a challanging read - But I dont get the impression its meant to be, rather it's fun, wholesome and makes you smile :).

Overall I'd say its a great success and a worthy winner - Thanks for writing it and goodluck with your next work😄😊.
- Momentie😎👍

Cupid's BLAME!

Chapter:40

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