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Momentie

Hi there,
This is the former home of my fiction - Unfortunately from drama, to a lack of innovation - To bugs that made the site unusable to me - My books are no longer being hosted here on here.

This in mind I'm leaving this note here to let people with an interest know you can find all my works in updated versions over on RoyalRoad & ScribbleHub - With plans for other releases yet to come.

For more info you can check out the final chapters of either 'UnderCurrent' or 'The Girl He Used to Know' - Which both depict my odd journey with this website😅.
HoneyFeed had its merits, it got me some feedback & I made some good friends here - But it is in effect the training wheels of web-noveling sites - If you are even slightly serious about your art or simply want a website that will teach you proper formatting & has an actual userbase - Then do yourself a favour, take off the training wheels & seek out the website that is right for you😊.

Best Regards,
-Momentie

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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Mar 25, 2022

Nicely done once again.
The use of body language is a great touch - I was able to pick up on it even before Jenna called attention to it, which suits the message well😊👍.

Further the characters are engaging - Jenna as an almost Sherlock Holmes figure, whom like Holmes has gained a deeper insight about the world around her by simply changing her perspective of the world & in turn teaches this to our somewhat haphazard Watson in the form of Caleb - It was really fun to read😊.

(If you haven't already, give the anime 'Gossik' a go some time - It's not advertised as such, but is one of my favourite Sherlock Holmes adaptations and really gets the original message alot better then many modern western adaptations😉😁).

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Overall these short stories have been really great - I've enjoyed coming back every few days to indulge in whatever concept took your fancy at the time.
All your ideas are fun, mostly commenting or iterating on stuff we as authors are familiar with - With that in mind I think the one on dreams is still my favourite, doing it in 2nd person was a great touch to put the reader (who is most likely a web-novel author themselves) into the boots of the protag.

(Sorry for the short review, haven't been in the right headspace for long form recently😅😅).
I'll be looking forward to seeing what else you post here in the future, I always love seeing authors experimenting outside of their normal genres😊👍.

Kazemonogatari

Chapter:5

Mar 25, 2022

Glad to know soccerballs survived the apocalypse 😂😉

Order

Chapter:6

Mar 25, 2022

To:Ochroleucous

My friend, I am that guy 😅 - One wall of my bedroom is a corkboard surrounded on all sides by sticky notes - We all have our ways 😁😉😂

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:102

Mar 25, 2022

To:Ochroleucous

Sounds like ya got it all planned out😁😁, those additions and chapters you mention sound like they'll be very beneficial so I'll look foward to them - Always fun seeing this world of yours expand😊😊.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:102

Mar 25, 2022

Hmmmmmmmmmmmm;
On the one hand I love the presence of a funeral, I think that's a great touch - On the other I have questions🤔.

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The Queen, is well, a 'queen' not a consort - That implies this state should now pass to her unless she abdicates.
If the intention is that this is like England where only one half is the ruler (ergo Queen Liz 2 is the current monarchy, her husband {rest his soul} was never the king and never would of been) - Then by proxy she isn't a queen.
That said perhaps I'm comparing fantasy, to reality a bit to hard here😂😅.

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Again I love the funerals existence but I think your framing of the king is a bit off.
On the one hand sure, we saw the king as an antagonist and now this funeral possibly reframes that - Except does it?

He was a bad dad from what we've seen, had a generally bad temper, runs a city with an active gladiatorial collosum, has villages under bandit control that he's not even aware of, etc etc.
Other then hosting a peace conference that presumably all races take turns doing - He seems like a fairly high strung jerk😅.

I can totally appreciate the act of showing a minor 'villian' like the king as actually being a nice guy from another perspective - But I'm not sure you really did enough to allude to that idea earlier on.

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King Fio's comments are nice and I really like him being a casket bearer - Only issue is it does make me question why he didn't send a proper intelligence team after the assassin instead of our humdrum band of scalewag heros - If he cares for retalation so much, he's got a funny way of showing it - Or Alot of faith in our boi Odel😅😅😂😂

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K I think that's all😂 - Congrats on 100 chapters btw 😁😁😊😊.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:102

Mar 24, 2022

To:EliteWarrior910

Bwhahahahahahhahahaha, I'll be sending it into the anime dubbing studies pronto, I'm sure they'll want me in every role😉😉😂😂😂😂😂😂.

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Glad you had fun with it, I like trying new stuff just for fun - I've no intention of ever actually recording an audio book but I'm glad if it's fun for someone😊😂

The Girl He Used To Know - Original HoneyFeed Version

Chapter:3

Mar 24, 2022

Getting given food money from your highschool age sister is a real harpoon through your pride😂😂.

My Life Is Already Bad...I Don't Need A Cat-Girl Making It Worse!!

Chapter:8

Mar 23, 2022

"if there was we would have brought bottles of it!" - I don't know Fiona, you guys didn't bring basic medical supplies and engine parts, I wouldn't be surprised if there was a wonder drug the Queen & Colton forgot to give you😂😂😂😂.

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On an aside I guess the role of town mayor is now open again, I would like the suggest my boi Adam - #VoteAdan😉😉😂😂

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:101

Mar 21, 2022

Hmmmmmm - The dad sent her to Gothard for protection but also doesn't want her to end up a mage - I think he picked the wrong friend to send her to, tho I suppose he was in a rush😂😛.

An Old Friend's Final Request

Chapter:3

Mar 21, 2022

'Ink-Lee' - Yup that's sounds authentic right there 😁😂

Magical Pom Pom

Chapter:11

Mar 20, 2022

To:Shnux

Fraid it's too late for that, I don't know everything but a manga reader spoiled the big reveals for me already😭😭

Attack On Titan Chapter 139 Rewrite

Chapter:1

Mar 20, 2022

To:Shnux

I definitely will😁, I was waiting for the fourth season to finish airing first - AoT is a show for binge watching in my experience (which is wierd cause normally I don't like binge watching but AoT is kinda addictive I guess)😂😉.

Attack On Titan Chapter 139 Rewrite

Chapter:1

Mar 20, 2022

I'm pretty sure being chased by a storm of literature is a nigthmare every writer has atleast once😂😂

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:99

Mar 20, 2022

Damn I can only image the over-cloaked nematus seperation is probably quite....bloody😭

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:97

Mar 20, 2022

I've only seen as far as S3 of AoT so I can't really read this, that said I felt I should leave a like & comment - As Congrats for your weekly and monthly ranking or whatnot😅👍.

Attack On Titan Chapter 139 Rewrite

Chapter:1