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Momentie

Hi there,
This is the former home of my fiction - Unfortunately from drama, to a lack of innovation - To bugs that made the site unusable to me - My books are no longer being hosted here on here.

This in mind I'm leaving this note here to let people with an interest know you can find all my works in updated versions over on RoyalRoad & ScribbleHub - With plans for other releases yet to come.

For more info you can check out the final chapters of either 'UnderCurrent' or 'The Girl He Used to Know' - Which both depict my odd journey with this website😅.
HoneyFeed had its merits, it got me some feedback & I made some good friends here - But it is in effect the training wheels of web-noveling sites - If you are even slightly serious about your art or simply want a website that will teach you proper formatting & has an actual userbase - Then do yourself a favour, take off the training wheels & seek out the website that is right for you😊.

Best Regards,
-Momentie

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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aaa

Mar 18, 2022

I'll a.... I'll finish this chapter later 😂, every time I read 'Lydia' as the daughter's name I can't help but think of that Skyrim meme😅😂.

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On an aside, another great concept for a chapter - It's totally the sort of thing one could see proforming well in the Japanese light-novel market😊😉.

Kazemonogatari

Chapter:4

Mar 16, 2022

I like the stuff about navigation in the town, getting closer to the mountain making the journey shorter and the great detail about the mountain's shadow especially acting as a giant sun-dial - Really helps to give everything some solid world-building 😊👍.

Order

Chapter:5

Mar 15, 2022

Hmm you need new webnovels you say?

I think you'd probably enjoy Eilte warrior's 'The Wolf Among Rats' and it's fantasy stylings - If your looking for quantity 'Ochroleucous' has loads of chapters and their really good - You also might enjoy 'Gen/Eris' stuff, it's got cat girls, much like your profile pic😂.

And those are just the ones off the top of my head - Lotta's good novels round here, I can recommend different ones all day 😎😊.

Another Day in the Life of Me

Chapter:105

Mar 13, 2022

To:Deleted User

Touché bud, touché😂😂😂😂

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:1

Mar 13, 2022

To:Deleted User

The heck you doing posting comments at this time a night😂😂

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:1

Mar 13, 2022

K lots to say😂;

Dunno if it was intentional but I think it's wonderful the title of this chapter - 'Finish the Fight' obviously being the famous Halo 2/3 line but moreover Master Cheif's arc in later games is about learning to rely on other people, those around him - Admittedly this is really only the case in halo 4 and the new one - But the point being that the title refences something with direct connections to Fiona's own arc.
If that was intentional then damn, that's a deep reference😅 - In the more likely case it's a coincidence, then that's an awesome happy accident 😁😊.

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Sticking with Fiona, maybe I'm just dumb but I honestly thought the fan club were girls.... This to me is brilliant - The way you've given them voices through dialogue, while leaving them vague enough that even their gender is a little unclear is great!
It makes the moment when they get properly described and their names reinstated, go from being a trio of comic relief - To a proper character moment for the princess - Great stuff😄😊.

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Interesting the mentions of her always being the black sheep and her siblings being wary - I wonder if there's more to Fiona then just some pranks and gone wrong experiments🤔😊.

Also teleportation is clearly the second best power (after Adan's in no.1 of course) - I can't see how teleportation would ever be seen as weak - Damn Aquarians and their wierd buercecy😂😅.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:95

Mar 13, 2022

To:WittyAcorn

Ah I see - I know what your referencing now that you say it but I'm not net-savy enough to recognise such things automatically 😂😂 - You'll have to forgive my lack of internet culture knowlage😅😅

The Mildpowered Virgins of Novylion High

Chapter:4

Mar 13, 2022

Ah-ha, now the peeing makes sense😂 - It might be better to have it be something like using her power makes her go more and more blind, then again it is comedy so I get what your going for😅😊.

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Let me also add that I love the Guna's, the way their mostly mundane, day to day abilities - The frastian deal of her father in this chapter - It's a really cool power system 😊😊.

The Mildpowered Virgins of Novylion High

Chapter:5

Mar 13, 2022

To:WittyAcorn

😅ummmm that's a bit much😂 - I presume you mean that as a joke but if you do mean it - Then try not to be so hard on yourself, I think it's quite fun - Wierd? Ya a bit .... But fun? Hell ya!😊.

The Mildpowered Virgins of Novylion High

Chapter:4

Mar 12, 2022

*Elfen Lied Flashback* Not entirely sure what purpose the woman's 'pee' detail added but here we are nonetheless 😂😅.

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On an aside I'm curious - Is this meant to be intended as a recording or interview of some kind? Considering the real time swap between father & son narrtion?😊😊.

The Mildpowered Virgins of Novylion High

Chapter:4

Mar 12, 2022

To:Gen/Esis

Sounds intriguing 😁😊

My Life Is Already Bad...I Don't Need A Cat-Girl Making It Worse!!

Chapter:6

Mar 12, 2022

One simple but great thing I like in your writing is the dialogue - It doesn't always work 100% but in this chapter for example it's great.
The way you describe little bits of Nisa and Ritsu's body language combined with naturally implented phrases like 'piss off' gives the dialogue a really grounded and natural feel - It doesn't work for all characters of course but for Ritus and Bob I think it's great😄😊.

Also, false memory's? The mystery thickens!🤔🤔

My Life Is Already Bad...I Don't Need A Cat-Girl Making It Worse!!

Chapter:6

Mar 11, 2022

My man, your description always impressive me - Their detailed in a way I personally love alot, from the great descriptions of this strange grey forest, to the use of a reflection for the protag - Always love the way you describe stuff, interested to see where this one goes😊😁.

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:1

Mar 11, 2022

To:kazesenken

Well for random one shots, their really good😊😁

Kazemonogatari

Chapter:2

Mar 11, 2022

God damn - I picked this particular book cause I wanted to try your work and it looked both fun and short - But what I got was something else entirely😄!

It's so rare to see people write in the 2nd person, espically in web-novel format and even more uncommon to see it done well like you've done here😁.

Further the use of writer's block as an metaphore is really great and obviously quite relatable to a site of first time writers - I do think it might be a bit much putting it so bluntly in the author's note, the story speaks for itself so the note feels unneeded😊😉.

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I also just love the idea of a writer who truely frees their creations - Who through dreams writes everything that we as cousious people may never get to.
That idea of 'what if I wrote' Is awesome - I really enjoyed this😊😊.

Kazemonogatari

Chapter:2