Feb 17, 2022
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.
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I'll save my final thoughts for after the epilogue but in regards to this chapter I'm mixed.
- The godess crystal thing at the end feels Uber rushed and lazy, no two ways about it.
I thought maybe Neithra would lead the army on a quest to remove the taint or something but no, just punch a friggin crystal lol😅😅.
- On a side note, I guess the mystery over Neithra's intelligence ultimately Equaled.... Nothing, she was just so uber smart that even under the taint she was smart😅🤔?
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Final battle is decent enough.
For everything I like in it, you do something I don't like;
- Tommy stepping up to be hero? Great - Him immediately being made an innocpentant retard with a useless sword? Not so great....
Anthryom developing to thrust the future to the NPC's? Awesome!
Anthryom surviving completely uninjured with no consequences or call out for planting C4 on Neithra? Not so great....
(Also if his layors of mega armour and clouths got burned off, then why not his phone? Is it a classic 'tank-proof' Nokia 210?!😅😂).
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Ya all told I'm between minds. Not sure if you saw my long comment from two chapters ago but the battle of the army's - Absolutely your worst work.
Contrastingly I think the harpy stuff is for the most part pretty good and makes for a decent final battle.
I'm also just mixed on what you were aiming for with some things.
Did you write the villians with the intention of them being pulpy one note schemers - Or were they meant to be taken seriously?
Cuase I can say now after the Toal arc, I at no point feared for anyone on the side of goods, life's.....
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I'll think on it a-bit more and read the epilogue, after that I guess I'll see how it all pays off by the end😊👍.
