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21, Voice Actress, American. Perpetually residing in a hell of my own creation. You can reach me on Discord @Vforest.
My acting work can be found on the home button. Paperback copies of Yesterhead are available for purchase on Amazon.
What is an Achievement?
Jan 10, 2023
To:Elukard
No, not at all, just providing critique. I’ll see for myself wherever this leads.
I feel like too much is being explained right away? Like I could wind up wrong, but you could build more intrigue by leaving out some of these details about their plans for us to discover later on, and the story would go faster that way too without needing to stop and diluvge all this info.
Hell yeah, why not? I’ll start checking out your work today.
Jan 08, 2023
To:Dracors
I imagine they’re pretty huge. For Mr. Parker, paying a few ripped humans is easier than hiring all the people to take care of and clean up after a bunch of large animals in the park.
Jan 04, 2023
Unfortunately for them, the moon’s not that much better.
Dec 29, 2022
To:cube
Have confidence!!
This is an excellent depiction of a self-isolating personality. Tomio quite obviously doesn’t quite care to be where he is right now, and his great hesitance to express himself in any way is not only evidence of that but also the final nail in the coffin for him. He’s hardly living the way he goes through life at this point, and the only companionship he finds is through trying to see his absent self through others, slowly realizing what he’s doing wrong. Positively excellent portrayal
The narration in this is great. Their addressing of the reader is pretty fun on it’s own, but it’s more their personality/tone that really sells it. Good stuff
Dec 26, 2022
Nai-bu talking about her extended relationship history feels so real. One of the best chapters so far
Dec 24, 2022
The aesthetic and world of this is already really up my alley. Cryptids, old horror movies, teenage internet publications- it’s all great.
Dec 15, 2022
I like your characters and dialogue a lot! The story’s getting very interesting now that I’ve got a feel for what our starting situation is, though I feel like we could’ve gotten here easier if the introductory chapters were a little less dense. It just feels like they bite off more than they can chew, going into exquisite detail through multiple POVs the past of the entire story. Because of this, that part of the novel simultaneously feels rushed because it’s technically quickly conveying a lot of information, while also feeling like it’s dragging because it’s going each and every way to do so. I feel like a few carefully picked scenes could have been chosen to introduce the setting and characters leading up to them reuniting, the real start to the narrative as I see it at this point.
Always happy to expand someone’s tastes
Zombies were the real monsters all along
Dec 13, 2022
Ooh that’s a really good tagline
Haha character death go brrr
