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Xiellion

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The webnovel author who decided he was going to write "fun".

registered at: Jun 06, 2022

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Jul 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

The Little Prince is a pretty good book if you ask me, I think it even has its own film too.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:12

Jul 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

What matters is that he has become the man he is today. 😎

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:13

Jul 31, 2022

To:Dracors

If I were her, I would have probably married him in a heartbeat 😆

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 31, 2022

Well, it's only been a day of the apocalypse so......

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 30, 2022

Hair with two spikes? What's Heihachi doing in a police uniform?

I found it a little weird that Jack's hair being blonde was mentioned only later after he was introduced. So I couldn't really imagine what he completely looked like before Zain started calling him blondie.

Also Rex is such a happy airhead what a vibe 😆

Red-Black Course

Chapter:3

Jul 30, 2022

Aw, the bully is actually more wholesome than I thought, almost thought he was just going to be some unimportant unnamed goon whose only purpose was to be a punching bag for Zain.

It's a little weird seeing such an abrupt change of heart, but I guess it makes sense.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:2

Jul 30, 2022

Woah, you have such a solid exposition. For me, it all felt balanced. The dialogue was pretty decent, but what got me was the way you set up the actions of dvery character. The lines they make may be rather simplistic and ordinary for prison talks, but the way you describe their demeanor and personality through the use of creative descriptions and details executes the intense scenery quite well.

My only concern is that Rex doesn't have any description at all, other than the fact that he's an adolescent boy.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:1

Jul 29, 2022

Music recommendation: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vT9iK6NYaTw

This one's a banger. I hope we can add music to our novels soon, that would sound cool right?

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 29, 2022

To:kazesenken

Thanks for reading! Didn't really expect it, but I'm glad it was fun for you.

I like the idea of using the fedora as a weapon though.....for style points.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:3

Jul 29, 2022

To:WALKER

Thanks for pointing it out, I might have never noticed it myself. Glad to hear the novel works out okay for you at least.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:2

Jul 29, 2022

To:kazesenken

I'd say she's the type of girl that tries to act tough, but struggles to do so as she's rather soft and fragile on the inside.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:2

Jul 29, 2022

To:kazesenken

I could argue that the teacher was pretty much in a rush because the zombies were about to breach the door anyway.

As for why my sentences are pretty much separated, I thought it would make it easier to read since it's spread out.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:1

Jul 29, 2022

To:WALKER

Damn, I haven't thought about that. I was just trying to go for the SCP vibes, where they go "Warning, This is not a drill." But now, it just sounds too weak and ordinary.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:1

Jul 29, 2022

To:kazesenken

That's an interesting suggestion, I'll consider cutting down some of it. But I've pretty much written this chapter to just be monologue and a way of introducing the character's perspective to the reader, which is why I turned it into a prologue. I'm not sure if I should add scenes to it.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:0

Jul 29, 2022

Gentleman? Respect. Is it possible to be both a gentleman and horni at the same time? Yes, that's Snazzy-chan for you.

Loving the dynamic between the two already. Maribell is surprisingly...reasonable. She does get angry, but she doesn't really antagonize our lovable jellyfish. Instead, she stays skeptical and gives him a chance.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:3

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