Aug 02, 2022
Don't take my comment here too seriously (I'm not a genius writer), but you should give it some consideration.
This is just my suggestion, but I feel like it would be better if you didn't just explain the history of the squad and instead make it feel like an "in the moment" kind of vibe.
I'll try to explain. Being "in the moment" is like, making it feel like the reader is actually in the past, rather than just being told what the past is.
For example, "Shuna was a cheery girl who tried to stick her nose blah blah blah" That for me is "Telling"
Maybe it would be better if it was like, "The first member was Shuna...." *flashback*
"Yahallo! I'm Shuna! Nice to meet ya! Let me join your squad pwease uwu! I want to pick the next person in the squad too!"
This is just a really stupid example of it, but it already "shows" that she's a cheery girl, without even having to explain to the audience.
Long paragraphs of explanation bore me to be honest, because you're not really in the scene. It feels more like history class, just being told everything you need to know.
