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Xiellion

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The webnovel author who decided he was going to write "fun".

registered at: Jun 06, 2022

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Jul 31, 2022

It would have been funny if they called themselves Zex instead. 👌

That would have been Zexy......

Red-Black Course

Chapter:8

Jul 31, 2022

Not gonna lie, that goal by Jack was pretty smooth, goes well with that elegant description too.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:7

Jul 31, 2022

Mans literally destroying handeggers like that 😆

Anyways, I take back what I said about the dialogue before, it's actually quite witty and funny, especially AIDE's commentary.

Of course Rex is supposed to be smart, he has to make up for his lack of strength after all.

BTW, this gives me Rocket League vibes.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:6

Jul 31, 2022

How the hell does one handle the ball with a motorcycle? I can't comprehend it, but it sounds really cool! Plus style points!

Red-Black Course

Chapter:5

Jul 31, 2022

Zamn, just how strong is Zain? I wonder what Rex did to survive the punch of a "freight train". I'm guessing it might be some big brain move.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:4

Jul 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

I decided to add some little details on a later chapter thanks to you, but you don't have to check it out because the change is quite subtle.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

The Little Prince is a pretty good book if you ask me, I think it even has its own film too.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:12

Jul 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

What matters is that he has become the man he is today. 😎

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:13

Jul 31, 2022

To:Dracors

If I were her, I would have probably married him in a heartbeat 😆

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 31, 2022

Well, it's only been a day of the apocalypse so......

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 30, 2022

Hair with two spikes? What's Heihachi doing in a police uniform?

I found it a little weird that Jack's hair being blonde was mentioned only later after he was introduced. So I couldn't really imagine what he completely looked like before Zain started calling him blondie.

Also Rex is such a happy airhead what a vibe 😆

Red-Black Course

Chapter:3

Jul 30, 2022

Aw, the bully is actually more wholesome than I thought, almost thought he was just going to be some unimportant unnamed goon whose only purpose was to be a punching bag for Zain.

It's a little weird seeing such an abrupt change of heart, but I guess it makes sense.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:2

Jul 30, 2022

Woah, you have such a solid exposition. For me, it all felt balanced. The dialogue was pretty decent, but what got me was the way you set up the actions of dvery character. The lines they make may be rather simplistic and ordinary for prison talks, but the way you describe their demeanor and personality through the use of creative descriptions and details executes the intense scenery quite well.

My only concern is that Rex doesn't have any description at all, other than the fact that he's an adolescent boy.

Red-Black Course

Chapter:1

Jul 29, 2022

Music recommendation: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vT9iK6NYaTw

This one's a banger. I hope we can add music to our novels soon, that would sound cool right?

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:11

Jul 29, 2022

To:kazesenken

Thanks for reading! Didn't really expect it, but I'm glad it was fun for you.

I like the idea of using the fedora as a weapon though.....for style points.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:3

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