Jan 22, 2026
So time to psychopost.
Seashells and Other Broken Things gonna be my second favourite of you I think, my favourite is the unmatchable Catgirls.
First the nitpicks. Character-wise, I had some difficulties with Mrs. Eguchi. Idk if I just should've read with more attention, but she's the only one who gives me that feeling: an unfortunately mobified character. When Koharu almost kills her, you spend enough time on for us to have a good idea of her personality. She's kind to Koharu, to the point she indulges in her whims. She'a Koharu favourite nurse. But then? It's like she lost all her presence with the accident. She's not especially referred to, when she's present in a scene her behaviour for the little it's said doesn't remind me of the nurse who slipped on the lucky stones. Like. I don't know but at one moment I had momently forgotten her name (just a me-thing) and when I realised it was her later I was like ''that's really the same person?''. Also since she's Koharu fav nurse it's a bit too bad that she's so little there after that one scene.
Another nitpick is more plot-wise. I think it's too bad that you didn't exploit the streams to their full potential. And by streams I mainly think of her fans and Kerochanfan. There's like a build-up in the beginning around that character but... Nothing really happens. Almost felt like you had an idea there but abandoned it. Tbh I was sure someone would find Koha-chin, or idk would be investigating there or else but Kerochanfan-lore lacking >:(
So, I have only praise left. Usually, I'll say I prefer by far romances set in an original setting rather then reality, but your prose makes it so great that I can say it's my second favourite lolofic. The first chapters are probably my preferred ones regarding that, since they have some insane comparisons. It's still very pleasant to read later but the first ones are extra-crunchy. 🤌
Crazy like you make a basic plot and basic events so enjoyable
Loved the unhinged knitting accident, the crutches used AS THEY SHOULD BE, Toshi being victimised by Koharu, Toshi being a snack,......
My favourite element might be the relation you've build up between Koharu and Oda. You don't even spend especially long scenes focusing on just the two of them and yet. The shared hobby, the nicknames they end up giving one another, the cute seashell gift (loved how detached he was the moment he did as if to avoid lingering on it as if he just offered her an antic treasure or idk;;; but I found it great. As I said in comments their relationship moved me. To make me depressed for people not knitting together again;;;;;;; btw the Koharu-leaving-the-clinic chapter is my favourite, banger
Last point I already posted a comment on it, but I thoroughly disagree with Mario. Idk where this is coming from;;;;; For me it makes no sense, it's normal and (I'm saying normal but not enough people achieve doing it) it gives more distinct voices for the narration if, depending the one ia passage is centred on, you use one name according to the level of closeness. And yeah, you made it clear from the beginning. Full name's being Nagumo Munetoshi anything can be used. First name or last name or shortened first name. Especially as you make it part of Koharu's jealousy, lingering for instance on how Dr. Shimazu calls him and how it worries-angers her.
With that, congrats on finishing and good luck for the contest!!🎉🎉
(Next next time there won't be a rushed ending, trust uwu)
