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J.P.B

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Nov 07, 2023

To:IncognitoMe

Thanks for your feedback Incognito. I agree there's too much in the story given the word count and that the change in Kean's personality was too abrupt. I wanted to strike a balance between worldbuilding and a self-contained plot but it was a challenge for me given the word count. Something I'll work on in the future. ^^

The Thanatos files

Chapter:1

Nov 07, 2023

To:IncognitoMe

Thanks for the feedback!

Slayer of Keres

Chapter:1

Nov 06, 2023

Great story! you did well developing the characters given the short word count. :)

yaoisobi

Falling Failing

Chapter:1

Nov 05, 2023

To:Steward McOy

Thanks a bunch for the constructive feedback! I haven't actually gotten around to playing cyberpunk 2077 actually. I was inspired by similar works though, especially Neuromancer and Snow Crash. Good point about the opening, I'll add a bit more onto it. 🙂

The Thanatos files

Chapter:1

Nov 05, 2023

To:Steward McOy

That's really helpful. Thanks a lot for the feedback!

Slayer of Keres

Chapter:1

Nov 05, 2023

Great work so far. It's refreshing to see an isekai that isn't set in a generic medieval kingdom.

Enchanted by a Witch From a Realm Called Earth

Chapter:2

Nov 05, 2023

Really interesting first chapter. The world needs more space idols!

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The Hoshinauts

Chapter:1

Nov 05, 2023

Great story. Really fits into the theme of the contest. I loved the imagery.

Sisi

Chapter:1

Oct 26, 2023

Great start to a novel :)

DreamScape: Survival of the Smartest

Chapter:0

Oct 26, 2023

Came for the cat, stayed for the writing. A surprisingly wholesome entry given the brief. Great job!

The Cat

Chapter:1

Oct 22, 2023

Interesting story. The layout almost makes it read like a poem. Good job! :)

1999

Inmate 1999

Chapter:1

Aug 13, 2022

Great first chapter! Keep up the good work

Kachi and his lovely eggs

Highschool Of Crime (HOC)

Chapter:1

Aug 13, 2022

Great first chapter! I like how hell uses the correct temperature scale

Welcome to Hell cover image

Welcome to Hell

Chapter:0

Aug 12, 2022

Looks like it's Harem building time

That time I got reincarnated in the middle of a royal wedding..

Chapter:8

Aug 12, 2022

Great work so far! What a cliff hanger

Down to Love

Chapter:3