Aug 31, 2022

To:Deleted User

Damn, never thought of that.

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Aug 31, 2022

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But she didn't become a queen, it was prince shoko that became the king.
The book was rushed as hell. But the future parts that already have planned will be much more planned out(if a win the contest, that is) .

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Aug 31, 2022

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Do have a suggestion?
I still have time to change the story.
Oh, and thanks for reading the whole story, it means a lot.

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Aug 31, 2022

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How did you know? (Today was basically the last day for me to finish the story, so I had to do it) .

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Aug 31, 2022

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Shit! Really didn't noticed that. Thanks!!!

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Aug 31, 2022

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Yeah, she won't, I hate when stories kill the protagonist to make more artificial emotional impact.

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Aug 31, 2022

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Not for long... The main reason why is she getting so strong is for character development , she's so obsessed in seeking revenge, feeling so powerful with the powers, but she lacks mental strength, being independent from someone, that will be her downfall.

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Aug 30, 2022

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She lied.

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Aug 28, 2022

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Don't know if you noticed, but he's the same guy from the first chapter.

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Aug 26, 2022

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A site said that it was bad luck but doesn't matter, just one thing I wanted to ask.
I don't know if you are, but I'm contesting in the Mal x honeyfeed event, do you think my novel (this one) will even be close to win?
Or I should get my hopes down.

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Aug 26, 2022

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It's better explained in the chapter, if you pour the milk before the sugar in the tea
You will have bad luck. It's a superstition.

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Aug 26, 2022

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No, it's actually a British thing.

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Aug 26, 2022

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The beginning of chapter begins with Valry shaking tremendously, Matthew comforts her, right after that, he mentions the accident that she was involved in, to add salt to injury, he compares Valry's actions to a cup of tea ridden with bad luck. That's the manipulative side I was trying to convey. He tries to make her more paranoid than she already is.

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Aug 26, 2022

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You're right, I thought it would be more dinamic to change perspectives, because the two are very interesting.
Matthew represents the reader, knowing more about Valry, and the narrator would show how manipulative is Matthew. Basically, Matthew was manipulating Valry "just like a doll."

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Aug 26, 2022

Note: This chapter has two narrators, the omniscient one and Matthew.

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