Aug 19, 2022

To:Deleted User

Can I make a very innocent question to you? I was typing some stuff and then I made a stupid mistake, because of the paste simple rule, I thought that I should correct my "didn't have" to "didn't had", but didn't had is incorrect. There's people on social sites that say that it can't be 2 past forms on the same phrase and I also saw that the verb do has an obligatory infinitive. In your opinion, which is the certain explication? Is two past forms incorrect or the verb do is the only one with this rule?

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Aug 18, 2022

To:Deleted User

I already have a plan for that.

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Aug 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

And believe me, there's a TON of character to be introduced yet.

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Aug 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

Alex is a diminutive of Alexander. Leonardo was already foreshadowed in the last chapter, so I decided to reveal him, maybe I rushed a bit with the introduction of new characters.

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Aug 16, 2022

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Yeah, I could give the argument that she still could throw knife when Daiyu was about to shoot her. Peter helped her without the intention. This last time, it was kinda a plot armor, to be honest.

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Aug 15, 2022

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She was going to die, normal that she'd let someone kidnap her, also, she got stabbed and really fatigued with the fight.

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Aug 14, 2022

To:Deleted User

That's exactly what happened.

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Aug 14, 2022

To:Deleted User

The nameless girl powers are overpowered, she can literally create a nuclear bomb and be fine with it but she has many weaknesses that can be explored by the protagonist, which I explained in the chapter. That's my logic. In my opinion, a villain must be overpowered against the protagonist (not invincible) , the conflict flows better.

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Aug 14, 2022

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Tanya can create ANYTHING with her powers, flowers are just a preference. Aia cannot break realities, if so, I would be a bad writer and give her an extremely convenient power, you will see her power in the next chapter.

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Aug 14, 2022

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Also, I think that is less organic to reveal their names with expository dialogue.

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Aug 14, 2022

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Actually, I'm a fate fan(but used the name "reality marble" to better describer her power), and about giving titles with their names, is to emphasize their personalities, in later chapters, that will be a less common thing.

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Aug 12, 2022

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Yeah, really need to use clarify better the characters actions, she threw the knife at Daiyu and the two ran in opposite directions. Peter was just standing there watching.

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Aug 12, 2022

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Like I said in other comment, I hate exposition. You need to read this the same way you watch a certain type anime, like boogiepop or serial experiments lain(these two anime are very confusing in the first episode but the story reveals itself after some episodes). You need to read another chapters to know the full context.

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Aug 12, 2022

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I introduced the prince in the last chapter before this chapter to imply that he was talking to Daiyu, I don't know if you noticed but I avoid exposition like it is the plague, that's why I don't reveal certain names, only decided to reveal Peter when he referenced that he lived in the castle, that's why it's a bit confusing.
Like, I even tried to use a different accent to imply that that was Peter talking.

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Aug 12, 2022

His way*

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