Sep 01, 2023
To:Naru_Sheny
Again, thank you so much for reading this story and for all your comments!! I appreciated all the feedback and made some genuine changes to the story that I think helped the narrative become stronger overall, so THANK YOU!!! <3 (And I hope to fully read Fantasia here soon, now that things are calming down~!)
1. The title theme is back! Claire has return, and so has "With a Love Sorceress" because they're together. It was the perfect chance to use the title, and really bring it together. (I love getting to use the story title as a chapter title xD so I'm very excited to see Fantasia does that too!!)
2. Ahaha some readers were more Mia/Toren fans, and a lot of people would have been sad (I think) if I didn't show them a little bit. But the focus of this final chapter (and book in general) was definitely Jun/Claire. There were moments where I could have expanded on Toren and Mia more (like you said, maybe showing more of their backstory, or showing the Amamiya/Toru date.) But I wanted to keep the focus on the main characters, and not get too sidetracked on the "secondary couple" which, as you just mentioned, some people weren't that interested in them xD (One of my biggest gripes in 12-episode romance animes is when the author gets too distracted with a secondary couple that they cut back the screentime for the main couple!! So I wanted to make sure I didn't fall into that mistake, while still giving Toren and Mia just enough screentime to feel fulfilling.)
3. Yep!! Post-credits scene was definitely the vibe! Feel free to borrow it xD I'm certainly not the first person to use that style, so I don't consider it 'borrowing' really at all!!
4. If I could make you even a little emotional <3 then I feel like I've done my job. As I said in my other comment, Claire and Jun becoming "regular humans" just felt too sad to me...and the idea of them becoming crazy world-hopping, fate-correcting cupids made me so much happier!! (Plus, if you want, you can totally imagine Claire and Jun jumping into other stories and being that "magical force" that brings the characters together xD which I love!)
As for planned endings -- I started this story with a few endings in mind, and told myself I'd follow where the characters and readers guided me. If readers ended up liking Mia *more* then I was willing to make her the primary love interest (but Claire, well, won over everyone's hearts by a landslide!) With Claire as the intended interest then, my endings were either "Claire and Jun become World Breakers together" or "Jun stays human and Claire becomes human with him", I never wanted to do a 'split' thing where one was immortal and had to watch the other grow old and pass away (I would cry.) So then I decided, World Breakers was just too much fun to pass up x)
5. Thank you for being along for the journey!!! "The wholesome romance aspect of this cannot be denied." -- let me just say, HECK YEAH!! I'm so glad you feel this way!!!! (And I did change that one point of criticism, so I hope it flows a little better now! 👍) Welcome to the "Claire best Girl" party. She's here for us all in our hearts ❤️ I did change Jun just a little bit in the beginning. Emphasizing the Dream aspect made his actions make SO much more sense, and it helped the narrative flow better. And I just changed a few lines of his dialogue from:
"How could this happen?" Jun yelled.
to
"How could this happen?" Jun asked sadly.
Which helped calm him down a bit. He's still a big baka xD but not one that's so angry and yelling.
(Toren going beast mode will have to be saved for another novel. Though I admit, I'd love to see that too!!!)
6. Ahaha I hope my story will do well! I've got Hime x Hime in my category, and that's a BIG contender! But as always, I wish everyone the best, and will congratulate all the authors for putting themselves out there, bravely posting online, and putting in the time and effort to write a story. That's no small feat. So really, I only have respect for everyone here!!
Thank you so much again!!! :D (omg I didn't go over the comment word limit? Amazing!)
(Hoping to catch up with Celluloid here soon too!!!)
