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Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

Yes...yes Hiroyuki did 😆 That is a teeeeeny bit of a plot hole I didn't quite resolve since I couldn't figure out a nice way to patch that up without derailing the main plot line. My best author's guess is: "The people who buy the land will end up selling the bamboo stalks as popular elf-decor/furniture product and still make a profit, even without making soup out of it."
A fresh start for Mia! And possibly for Toren too 👀 but things remain unanswered for Hiroyuki and Claire here...

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:27

Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

Yes!! The whole "World Breaker" concept ended up a bit complicated, unfortunately 🤔 it's something I hope to simplify/clarify when I can edit the text! But I think you understand the gist of it correctly!! 👍 "Faint Stars" is sort of like Phase 1 (they haven't gained any powers yet, they're just people born outside the flow of fate) and then Phase 2 is when they actually disrupt fate, and in doing so become a World Breaker.

Claire glossing over things like grease on a skillet is a great comparison 👀 but trust me, we'll get answers before this novel is over!! xD

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:22

Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

If I had to guess, Hiroyuki probably DID spend quite a bit of effort on his relationship with Amamiya on Earth...but put in his effort in the wrong ways. (Like, spending forever trying to research the "perfect gift" for her and come up with "perfect date plans" -- when really, Amamiya would have preferred for him to spend that researching time just hanging out with her.)

Oooh I haven't watched Tomozaki-kun yet, is it good? :D

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:20

Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

I still have hope for Hiroyuki and Toren being friends after the end credits of this story 😁 maybe with a few barriers for that friendship (I won't say any spoilers!) but I honestly ended up really liking their dynamic together!

Mia and her father were a tricky thing to write, but hopefully the emotions and relationship between them ended up being conveyed decently even with the quick set-up and reveal! Mia has full rights to be upset!!! But at the same time, I wanted there to be hope for things to work out between them

The last few lines are from experience 🤣 Though admittedly not bamboo gardens, I've shouted off rooftops with a good friend of mine, and there's just something strangely cathartic about it. (**Though small note xD they were rooftops at the edge of town facing an empty forested area, because we didn't want to bother people in the city LOL)

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:19

Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

I hoped to make every character (Toren included) be a little bit more than just their standard archetype! :D Some characters obviously ended up with more development than others 😆 (I'm so sorry Toren, I wanted to give you more screentime!) But I'm pretty happy that I managed to break them out of the usual "stereotypes" just a bit!

"I need answers!" 👀 exactly the reaction I hoped for with this story, hehe

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:17

Nov 29, 2023

To:t_tomodachi22

Welcome back and thank you so much for taking the time to read!! I hope your cold has gotten better (with no lingering symptoms!) And that the teaching is going well.

ALSO thank you for all the comments!!! I've been smiling so much while reading them. You've been right on the money with some of your guesses 😉 but I'm glad to see I can still pull a few twists here and here ❤️

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:16

Nov 29, 2023

To:K-J-Whitten

Thank you!! I know it's a bit of a speedy start for a romance, but I was aiming for a hook to keep the pages turning and get things going! :D
Thanks for checking it out, and I hope to see you around

With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:1

Nov 21, 2023

Oh my gosh, I think you made it to the finals :D congrats!!!!! 👏🎉👏 You have my vote
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Chapter:1

Nov 16, 2023

To:EliteWarrior910

No worries! 🤣 Glad to know someone shared my sentiment 👍

Some random girl wants to make me her familiar

Chapter:10

Nov 15, 2023

And so we bring a close to the tale of Avalon! We get to see the characters for one last time here in the embassy (Sora is adorable!) and see that Arisa and Ayato are doing well ❤️

I really liked that you ended up explaining why the world has a mix-up of mythologies (it's a dream world built for Arisa) and how Mab and her child ended up becoming an important plot point for defeating Prince Lorenzo's evil schemes.

For me, the beginning definitely felt a bit rushed and like events were happening at random, but as I kept reading you gave meaning to those beginning events, and everything started to make sense. So I think your writing got stronger as you continued to write this novel!!

Congratulations on completing this story for the contest and for being in the finals! 👏👏👏 🎉 And thank you for sharing it with us!

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:32

Nov 15, 2023

So Ayato decided to stay in Avalon. I mean, his friends are in Avalon, the girl he likes is in Avalon, he has a stable job as an Ambassador, and he has crazy magic powers, he managed to fix his "demon in his head" problem...

I see no real reason to go back to Earth just to become a normal doctor, honestly 🤣 other than maybe missing his family. Ayato already has everything he wants in Avalon! Plus he's a magical hero there!! :D

(Also I enjoy that Rak is now a kawaii anime girl demon hehe)

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:31

Nov 15, 2023

So Arisa "died" on Earth and can't return 😭 that's why she wasn't so happy about the idea of returning.
And maybe this isekai world really WAS created as a dream, filled with Earth's mythologies because the ideas were all taken from Arisa's thoughts and dreams. 😧 But if that's true, how did Ayato end up in her dream?

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:29

Nov 15, 2023

So Prince Lorenzo is now backing down, and is no longer a threat. All that remains is hoping the gods will be kind and willing to send them back to Earth in one piece...and not turn them into frogs! 😲

Oh and hey I did get an answer about Rak! He'll disappear when Ayato leaves! (Maybe that's a good thing 😆)

Though with all these goodbyes, it's starting to feel like maybe Arisa and Ayato don't want to leave. Arisa never really said she wanted to return to Earth, did she? Though I guess she has amnesia, so maybe she's not sure.

"He felt like he'd heart the name Sora before -- maybe from a video game or something?"
Kingdom Hearts? 🤣

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:28

Nov 15, 2023

Halfling growth saves the day!! 😆 I am very glad you were able to bring Mab's story into the main plot! It makes the early chapters make much more sense!! :D I think if you put in a little bit of foreshadowing in those early chapters (hinting that Mab and her child will be important for dealing with that "pesky prince" or something) then Mab's arc would have felt more purposeful when I first read it! 👍

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:27

Nov 15, 2023

Ayato has a secret weapon? 👀 maybe this is where Mab and her child end up being a part of the bigger story? I know the position of Prince/King is something that's elected in this world. So I think maybe if the people knew that Prince Tommaso actually had a child...then Lorenzo's claim for the throne might be threatened?

The Songstress of Avalon

Chapter:26

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