Jul 25, 2023

To:IceDonut

They are absolutely glamping 🤣 though maybe with a bit less litter! The farmers would probably attack them if they started messing with the fields! (Would that be a bad thing? 🤭 Maybe not. But then this story would turn into a Battle Anime.)

The festival will be a changing point for the romance!! And for the future! It's also a bit of the calm before the storm...the festival will be a bright moment, leading up to the final story arc after this!! 👀

Mia and Toren originally had a longer origin story, but it got made shorter for time reasons. I'm still happy with this current version though, because it quickly shows their dynamic as kids, and how that shaped how they think of each other now! (Toren thinks of Mia like a savior, and he secretly always liked her. Mia thinks of Toren as the big brother who used to tell her fun stories.) Now we just need to get Toren out of the brother-zone! 🤔

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Jul 25, 2023

"Why did he want to dictate her life so badly?" Heck yeah Haruhi!! 😤😤 My sentiments exactly!

But gosh when he came around the corner and you listed all of Ichika's feelings...oh man I felt them all and it fit so well and just 👏 the writing there was on POINT!!!! That little arm around the shoulder ❤️❤️❤️ eeeeee!!!

Man Ichika is both happy, but mad, but also like overcome by the fate/coincidence of it all. And then. She just.
Knees him in the face 🎯
I mean, is it really love if she doesn't knee you in the nose? Or German Suplex you? Or hit you in the face with a soccer ball? Or maybe teleport you into another world and replace you with an NPC that walks repeatedly into walls?

...look I gotta get my references in somewhere ;) my story doesn't lend itself to dropping them.

Nose bleeding. Head spinning. Laughing like mad. Yep. This is adorable ❤️

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Lucid Levia

Nobles be like "Camping? Bring me 20 servants to handle the difficult work, and my finest carriage. We'll not be outdone by that Bevelton family like last year!" And then each family tries to outdo the other, and the others, and then, well...you get the Painted Moon Festival 🤣

Literally that is exactly how I imagine it happening. Mia just ran up with scissors and just BAM! Cut a hole. Then barely sewed up the frayed edges 🤣 I'd like to think Toren actually has better sewing skills than her now, owing to him spending more time trying to actually hem the seams to look good over the years.

Her magic is admittedly an introvert's dream hermit world 😂 I hope I eventually get to explain that her powers are unique. (Not every World Breaker gets as crazy magic talents. The power they get depends on their own natural power, and also what kind of World Champion they derailed.) So she did luck out in the magic talent department!! But of course, even with all that magic power, she still doesn't quite have what she wants 👀

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Deleted User

I realized Toren had been through enough ridiculous outfits, it was time to let him wear a suit!! 🕴️ Popcorn time for this festival 🍿 things about to go down! We'll see about that dance~ 👀 there might be a teeeeny tiiiiny bit of celebratory drinks before then, who knows what'll happen?

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Shulox

I finally slowed down for a minute to show off some description Usually the word count means I focus mostly on dialogue and events, but I knew the festival was time to bring out some of my description skills!!

My romance plots always have to go through a little heartbreak first 💔 😉 so they can return with devotion even better than before!! We have to miss a few goals before that final game-winning kick! ⚽

The festival chapters are something I've been looking forward to since the beginning! So I'm really excited to get to share them with you all!!! 🤩

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Funsui

Tiny backstory!!! <3 I wanted to put a little something in there for him 😺 for best cat boy! I'd love to fit in more stories about him, but I might have to save them for bonus chapters 😆 since I know pacing-wise I still need to focus on the main characters first!! (Toren just radiates such MC energy I forget he isn't sometimes 🤣 cat boy main character for my next novel, maybe?) Hoping for that dance!! 💃

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Katsuhito

You spoil me, you speedy reader!! I haven't gotten the chance to read your chapter yet, but it's the next thing on my to do list, because you all treat me so nicely with all your comments 🥹
I realized (a little late) that a small village would not exactly have rooms to support a giant festival. THUS! The rich shall CAMP!!! Mwahahaha! (In their fancy trailers, because of course they have fancy trailers 🤣)
I wanted to hint a little bit about Mia and Toren's background, since they were childhood friends. I have all these little stories between them in my head, but not quite any place to fit them in the story...but smol Mia with scissors needed to be included ✂️😤 I wasn't about to let that get edited out!!
Claire is literally living the LIFE. I mean, it's in eternal solitude, but she's got food, wifi, infinite worlds of entertainment...I might've, uh, made her confinement a little too nice 😭 but I regret nothing, I'm giving her all the nice things!! (supermarket inflation is the silent killer of my wallet. RIP potato chips. I haven't bought them in over a year now because they've tripled in price from what they used to be, I swear.)
Dance time~ ;) get hyped!!!

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Frog

Thank you so much!! I try to keep things upbeat and fun 😆 It's an ever chronic battle between trying to get across exposition, while also choosing scenes that have action!
I would of course be so excited for you to read more 💕 but please take your time, I realize this story has gotten a biiiit long now 🤣 I'm just happy to know the intro is still catchy!! Also interested in your novel now too, your cover art and premise both look so cool!! :D

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Jul 25, 2023

A triple upload?!? :D one on each story! You spoil us!!! I'll be back with more focused comments once I have a chance to read but I saw the notification and had to applaud you 👏👏👏

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Per Astra

I'll catch up with your new chapters here in a little bit!! My life is a bit overloaded right now and I'm trying to read way too many books, but I love all the stories that are here for the competition and I'm trying to support ❤️

And I knooooow ;___; the first cover I made for my novel I worked so hard to add all these little details on, and then it totally got lost when I uploaded it! I saw your full resolution version you linked on imgur, the detail work is just STUNNING!!!! ✨ The little detail on the center of all the flowers? The chain around his wrist? The golden embroidery on the jacket?! 👌 The water shading?! [chef's kiss!] C'est magnifique!

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Taylor J

Absolutely Fabio hair, billowing in the wind...dramatic, shining, maybe with a shiny ding from his white teeth as he smiles 😁✨

Mia won't be impervious to his charm, but she's certainly not the type to just be swept away into a romance 🤣 if she was, I think my story might have ended up so much shorter, hehe!

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Jul 25, 2023

To:yitsuin

Madam Claire really showing her true colors!!! 😤 A bit of a klutz? Check. Good sense of humor? Check. Possibly a deeper dramatic backstory~? ... 😏 You know it!!

The elf transformation being more of a Disguise than an actual Rebirth will definitely have an impact later down the line. As the half-lies start to pile up a bit, and things unravel and change ❤️😁

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Jul 25, 2023

To:yitsuin

Fangirl vengeance!? I'm here for it ❤️❤️❤️ 🥰 I was a lurker for last year's competition and didn't have an account back then. Finally worked up the courage this year because the idea of "wholesome" as the prompt really spoke to me! Once August is over, I plan on going through and reading through a lot of books on my list <3 😉 So you might get a flood of likes and comments from me when that happens 🤣 because I've been meaning to reread your works and leave the support I didn't post last year!! 🌟

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Kaisei

Yep, yep ❤️ you see right into my characters 😤 Mia's definitely sensing that Roki/Jun is different than before -- and maybe feeling that he isn't as love-stuck as he used to be. And Mia grew up on hard work & dedication 💪 taking advantage of people isn't in her style!!
I'm glad you like Mia, because I freaking love the strong female cast in your writing (Diane ❤️❤️❤️) and I'm working on trying to write characters like that myself! I actually have a bit of a difficult time writing female cast 🥲 so this has been both practice and a challenge for me!!

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Jul 25, 2023

To:Kaisei

My own microwave oven degree is showing through •ワ• shhhh. I definitely haven't made toxic bamboo soup before irl. definitely haven't. nope.

Roki always had this generous side to him (buried under being a very impulsive baka 🤣 and slightly a bit too headstrong due to his upbringing) and I'm glad I had the chance to show it. You're right, he is kind of the type to get maybe...a little too attached to helping/liking someone, even if he doesn't really love them. (The tunnel vision strikes again!) But I've got some plans to help him realize that selfless generosity isn't always the answer~ 👀

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