Jul 24, 2023

The magical TV-remote wand teleports them... straight to the academy!! Nice!! :D

Main character about to ditch the mission if the principal doesn't have good stockings. Well to quote your own first chapter: Priorities, am I right? 😤 🤣

I also like that Official-God-of-Love Kupimor has immediately been demoted to "minion" and "quest giver" status 😂

Was waiting for our main character's secret ability to be subliminal ESP...thus, the headmaster 100% suggests "Incontinencia Buttocks" as a name since he got the ESP thought.

Excited for a name!! Hopefully! 🤞

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Jul 24, 2023

I was totally imagining Asterion as a follower type of NPC that players could recruit to temporarily join their party 😭 which would totally derail Asterion and Daffodil's main mission!

So glad they didn't have to find out exactly *what* Asterion's NPC function was 😁 the cloth strips were a good idea! 👍

Wait, the other NPCs are real now to them!! It's like a total flipflop! The human player characters are now the 'bland dialogue cutscene NPCs', while the previous NPCs are now like actual people! Wilhelm is on the case! The...book case 😂 (I'm so sorry)

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Jul 24, 2023

The second I saw "duct tape" in the title, I clapped my hands and chimed the gong for Sato's funeral 🙏📿 may he find peace in his shiny, silver restraints. He might've gotten away with it if he just didn't say anything to Mai!! 🤣

Hatsumi is really fast in love with Jun! But I think it's adorable that she's nervous about holding hands 🤭 ...maybe Ryota ought to take Mai's advice for their date this next Sunday: Look for a time where they both feel at ease, then try holding hands! ❤️❤️

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Jul 24, 2023

Ichigo shows up exhausted...but with an invitation to her house!! Maybe the perfect opportunity? 🤔
I bet Sara's already heard all about Kyo, huh? From her nee-san talking about her crush? Hmmm?? 😁 ❤️❤️ "Netflix and chilling" oh nooo 😭😭 she shouldn't know that phrase yet 🤣
A fight over the artistry leads to a fall...and a kiss!!!! 🤩
(Look away Sara! Look awaaay 🤣)

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Jul 24, 2023

Paltar doesn't know how to handle kids 😭 that is both cute and slightly sad, knowing he had hoped to start a family in his first life. But he has time to learn!!

For now: Nanna-hime to the rescue 🪿🎀 as the cute talking goose!! And also to warn them about the poisonous plant!

Okay, Paltar making a stuffed mouse for Eo might be the newest cutest moment 🥹 That was such a sweet and smart idea. And it really made use of Paltar's talents!!! Now I just hope they can get Eo somewhere safe~

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Jul 24, 2023

135!?!!!? 😲 That's a high scoring game omg! They absolutely crushed it! 🎉 And they weren't even playing to their full potential 🤯

Keith is realizing what an awesome team he has, and how fantastic it is that he can learn from these guys!! Keith's thoughts are really changing here and I love that he's becoming more and more of a team player ❤️

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Jul 24, 2023

Chibi ⭐ Star ⭐ Karaoke
Sounds freaking cool though??
Like. That bar sounds nice. I mean any place I can order espresso AND prosecco is pretty much up there on my list. And a cool stage too? I'd visit!

Open mic is the first hurdle!! Singing in front of a small crowd can sometimes feel more intimidating than a big one! But she can do it!

And the second she gets on stage she just transforms 🌟 I bet Daiki won't be the only one to notice her talent!

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Jul 24, 2023

Kazuo's favorite place is still to be decided! Maybe, since he doesn't have a favorite place, this will be an opportunity to *make* a new favorite place with some good memories with Suma? Maybe? 😉

Excited for group lunch and friendship antics!!

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Jul 24, 2023

Oh man so even Suma has to offer advice to Ami/Toyo pair 😆 in the middle of her own assignment!

I think it's fair for Suma not to want the whole class to know about her manga hobby. Not everyone reacts to manga-fans nicely. It's probably better to tell people one-on-one than just publicly broadcast it 🤣 so I can't disagree with her there.

But both Suma and Kazuo are a little unusual~ maybe that will be what brings them together!

Also liking the new title c: I think it ties things together a little better!

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Jul 24, 2023

These guys have beaten each other to bits, and are now exhausted...nothing left but just the desire to win, and not be the first to pass out.

...did Arthur just eat his own fingers
⊙▽⊙
Oh no. Any spell that requires that is not going to be a Nice Spell.
Arthur's going to try the ritual to destroy Jack's soul again, isn't he?
Frawa sounds absolutely terrifying.

But now Jack, Emmett, and Maria are all awake and here. Arthur is (temporarily) bound back to just being a thought in Jack's head. Maybe they can stop Frawa and do this!!! :D final final boss round time!

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Jul 24, 2023

Arthur is overcome with all the emotions the void had been holding back 😭 it's both frighting to have him as an opponent, and sad to see him this way...

"There was only one thing on Jack's mind: I want to smash his head in!!"
Got me sitting here like YEAAAHHH!! Even though normally I try not to be pro-violence 🤣 at this point i just feel like it's time for these two to PUNCH IT OUT!!!

Jack's laughing? Oooh? Does he have a plan?! :D

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Jul 24, 2023

A wisteria yukata sounds lovely for them 🌹 and a lovely little hiding place for an almost-public kiss? 😉

Ooh Haru's starting to mix together reality/dreams with Kasumi/Grace because of his happiness. Glad that pink wig could help him realize that he didn't just think of Kasumi as a replacement. Kasumi is definitely her own girl!

And Grace is definitely her own girl too 💕 (even if she is just a part of Haru 😤 will always love Grace, no matter what her true self is)

Hoping Haru can capture that feeling of freedom~
(Also, first comment?? :D I'm finally here early! Your chapter upload caught me while I was online 😆)

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Jul 24, 2023

I'm now imaging Shiraito extremely drunk, patting Daisuke's hair, slowly repeating "Good puppy. Good puppy." While poor Daisuke plots his revenge 😭😭

Nao's nervous laugh after Takashi mentioned Nao incorrect calling herself "two years older" 🤔🤔 hmmmmm!! And then Nao runs off to the bathroom? Is she hiding something?

...Shiraito confirmed Pingin cosplayer. Omg. I...I might have to draw that too. It would be the stupidest drawing but 🤣 gosh I can see it.

And then Nao doesn't answer her phone 😭😭😭 I'm really hoping she's just napping! And she wasn't tired because she's actually just a ghost back for Obon and now she's returning to the spirit world and she really won't see Takashi agaaaiiiiinnnn
(╥﹏╥)
(my insane theories are returning)

The journey is coming to an end ❤️/💔 I hope we still have a little longer to spend with these wonderful characters!!

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Jul 24, 2023

Ahhh!! Okay I was so worried you were going to drop the story 😭 but a trip is a much better notice!! I apologize I haven't been around to comment as much, my life has gotten busy and I'm juggling a few too many things at the moment 😣 but I've been keeping up with reading!!

Please enjoy your trip! Also, I think it's very smart to know what's best for you and your writing ❤️ I'm sad to see your entry leaving the contest, but I'm also really excited for your planned changes!!! I know how much the contest word limit can really hamper stories that focus on world building, descriptions, and longer, deeper concepts!! Which I think your story really would flourish with more time to explore those things :D (Not to say I didn't like what you had before though 😆 Wait. I feel like somehow I'm not getting across what I want to say right. Forgive me 🙏😅)

Sending you support and encouragement and see you in a week!!!

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Jul 24, 2023

To:yitsuin

Oh my gosh!!! Thank you so much for checking this out!! 🤩 I'm so freaking thrilled that you like the premise, especially since you're the author that wrote Our School is Perfectly Ordinary!! 🙈 Eeeee!!! (Don't mind me fan girling, I'm just always so excited to get to talk to you!! 🤣)
I wanted the intro to be fast, punchy, and maybe a little crazy 😉 because I knew I only had a few chapters to really get across a hook! Jun is definitely flawed and unreliable 🤣 but that gives me so much room to help him grow ❤️ the focus here will definitely be on character growth (after this crash course of an intro!)
My dude is just staring at his golden hair like "...maybe I should be worried now? Maaaaybe?" 😅
But really, thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment 🤗 it absolutely made my day!

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