Jun 17, 2023
Your story is certainly interesting so far. When I read the premise I expected a lot more fluffy and cute romance but you chose to establish the world Edwin now lives in first. World building is definitely the best point of the story right now and I'm guessing that Edwin's job as a mystic is more than just a plot device so it's a good idea to establish those things in detail which you're doing really well. You're even setting up various different worlds, that's certainly very impressive.
It only comes with a small issue. Focusing so strongly on world building right at the start of the story could be seen as slightly dull and boring, however right now I can't think of any ways to mix it into the plot you're trying to set up so take this as something to consider rather than an actual nitpick.
Chapter 4 gave a neat teaser of what we can probably expect in the near future (lots of double trouble for Edwin) xD
