Jul 05, 2023
I like how you separated this chapter into two parts - reality and a dream. This way it's easier to read the chapter for sure.
Great job with presenting the MC! He's not perfect and looks and feels very much like a real human being.
I'm no grammar expert but I think some parts could do with a little bit of polishing (minor tweaks). Since I like to read stories out loud, I could feel that some articles were missing and word order didn't feel right.
Awesome story! Will be catching up with it more next time
