Aug 19, 2021
You seem to writing in script style, while easily shows the dialogue. But there are a few weird style choices, such as writing in 1st person. You don't usually combine 1st and script. It's not good form. Of course, there's a lot of leniency when it comes to webnovels, but it's best not to get into that habit.
Not to mention, using 1st person tends to be more personal of a feeling, with internal monologue and thoughts. I don't really see much of that, so 3rd person would have served better for you.
Aside from that, we have a basic scene that flows ok, but doesn't have much detail to it to capture one's attention. I would imagine that a couple would chat about more specific things to are telling of their characters, a chance to show who they are. The only thing I got was a liking for Arthurian legends.
The narration itself is pretty good otherwise, which makes me think that you should dump the script dialogue in favor of properly doing it in a novel.
