Jan 22, 2025
I'm not great at writing reviews, so I wanted to leave a quick comment on your last chapter with my overall thoughts.
I had so much fun reading your story! The action just kept coming, and there was never a dull moment. Some of the challenges felt a little out of left field, but honestly, that added to the charm of the Games. I loved how all the contestants really felt like teenagers. They acted their age, which made them super relatable. Eligh and Mara were both really likeable, and Kaien was absolutely goated as the commentator. I know I've trashed on Jordan, but I kind of grew a soft spot for him by the end.
If I had one area to nitpick with the characters, it'd be Oliver and his relationship with Eligh. I feel like if there were more sibling moments between them, it would've made the tension around the Games' mystery hit harder. Also, some of the one-off characters like Tessa and Trip had so much potential. I would've loved to see them more fleshed out.
If it weren't for the tight comp deadline, I think there'd be room to expand each phase a bit more since they had so much potential for extra depth. I did notice a few loose ends, but I totally get it if that's just because of the comp deadline.
In any case, congrats on finishing your story! ๐ Hope you keep writing because you've got such a fun way of writing!
