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Kumin the Hen

Don’t ruffle my feathers with bad prose.

Current reading list (not in order):
Hotwired!
Air Born
BlackBrain
The World Doesn't Change So Easily
Red Line
Finding Ezri
Eclipse Guardians
Seike
so much to read @_@

registered at: Nov 13, 2024

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Jan 03, 2025

Honestly that’s pretty impressive LMAO And no way, I’ve been to Greece too! Very awesome place. It's pretty cool your sailing trip inspired you!

The World Doesn't Change So Easily

Chapter:7

Jan 03, 2025

To:Ćunfre

Looking back, I might’ve gone a little overboard with all the characters out to get Shiro. Too late to have regrets now though 🤡

Shiro and the Iron Whale

Chapter:17

Jan 03, 2025

To:chibiandreea

Thanks Anya! Here, some peanuts for you~🥜🥜🥜

Shiro and the Iron Whale

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

When the faction name is longer than a Japanese light novel title 😭

Anyway, loving Terr’s voice! Super relatable with that sarcastic edge. The whole Yellowstone eruption aftermath feels super believable too, and I’m really curious to see where you’re going with the factions.

One thing though, some of those paragraphs are a bit long. Maybe break them up with more dialogue to help with flow?

(I like your pfp btw hehe)

Cross Country

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

I totally read Mayor Agatha's lines in Effie's voice from Hunger Games by accident LMAO. And the black pods make it feel like the Mayor is throwing everyone a rager before the Games start 😂

Anyway, loving the whole "gift orb" idea. You've set the stage for some wild stuff to go down!

Gear Up!

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

Loving the whole floating city of Zephyra setting- it really sets this apart from the other entries. Overall, great chapter! You've got a cool story cooking here

Beneath the Sky's Veil

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

Ey fellow cryogenics writer, what’s up?

Ofc someone with an Anya pfp would write about a dating show LMAO

Pick a Brain & Fall in Love

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

I know the S-Flu’s rough, but no way it’s bad enough to make you forget about chocolates 😤

BlackBrain

Chapter:6

Jan 03, 2025

And you’re over here saying I let people get attached to a character just to kill them off later... okay, you didn’t exactly say that, but you get what I mean LMAO

The World Doesn't Change So Easily

Chapter:9

Jan 03, 2025

*Head pats Emidio* 😔

Everyone knows the best way to impress a girl is to steal a mug for them LMAO

The World Doesn't Change So Easily

Chapter:8

Jan 03, 2025

Ay nice we get to learn about all the roles on the ship. I can tell you really did your research and put a lot of thought into it!

The World Doesn't Change So Easily

Chapter:7

Jan 02, 2025

To:Bakajanai69

If I had a nickel for every time someone thought Axel was the MC, I'd have two nickels. Which isn't a lot, but it's weird that it happened twice LMAO

Anyway, thanks so much for the awesome feedback! So glad the opening hooked you. Axel has been one hell of a character to write, so it’s great to hear that you like him! I’ve also put a lot of thought into the world-building, so I’m glad that came through well!

I’m excited for you to see more!

Shiro and the Iron Whale

Chapter:1

Jan 02, 2025

To:DEVI-デヴィ

Omg I totally missed this I feel bad for not replying sooner 😭 Happy Belated New Year to you too! 🎉

Anyway, thank you for the encouragement! I’m genuinely surprised (and super thankful!) that I got recommended in Discord. Ngl, I’m dying over here, but I WILL finish. GAHHHHH

BlackBrain

Chapter:5

Jan 02, 2025

To:Ćunfre

I didn’t mean to make everyone get so attached just to pull the rug out from under you LMAO but I’m glad the bait-and-switch kept things interesting! Shiro was always meant to take the spotlight in the end, but I love how much love Axel got along the way. It’s honestly such a cool feeling knowing people were rooting for him like the MC!

Shiro and the Iron Whale

Chapter:14

Jan 02, 2025

To:Vinyl

Np at all! It’s interesting how hyphens are used differently in different languages. It makes sense now that you mention it, and I’m glad I could point it out!

I’ve always found Orianna’s gameplay super intriguing (I could never play her though LMAO), so the fact that your story has something similar is really interesting to me! The fact that your story has something similar, but with multiple smaller balls, makes it even more interesting. Would love to see how you develop it!

The Guardian of Rossmaria

Chapter:1

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