Han Quixote

Han Quixote

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    Apr 14, 2025

    I was typing out a long comment and then it got lost in the wind because HoneyFeed thought I was a bot… so let me try to remember what I wrote (and shorten it because… Jesus)

    First, this is a dense chapter with many complex ideas–which is what makes this chapter standout. I was right there with IRIS when she didn’t understand some of the things Mark said. Then Mark summarized afterwards. Haha. Good choice.

    The complex topics Mark guides IRIS through helps to establish their relationship–Mark is the father figure who understands things in depth, while IRIS is a “child” who is trying to understand who she is–or who she should be. So in that sense, the exposition makes that relationship EXTREMELY clear.

    Of course, IRIS will eventually have to develop her own personality and begin standing her ground as an “individual” instead of staying as “the AI that listens to Mark”. But I’m sure that’s coming in the future.

    Also, there’s an interesting move there that foreshadows someone’s appearance later in the story–it’s a good way to keep a reader on their toes.

    I do think that following this chapter with another dense chapter would hurt my brain as a reader (but here it’s okay since this helps build IRIS’s foundations), but it’s your choice whether or not you follow this up with another technical chapter back-to-back.

    Also, I wonder where Clara and Kaito went? I guess they just left after being kicked out?

    And as a side note, you write “LYRICA” in chapter one and “LIRICA” in this chapter. I’m either lost and don’t understand that they’re separate entities, or they’re the same entity and it’s a spelling mistake.

    But yeah, good work.

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    Apr 14, 2025

    To:Orionless

    Hey buddy.

    So I'm at another point in time right now where I'm pretty sure my story is about to evolve once more, thanks to the contest.

    I just wanted to mark this chapter for that, haha. Like this is where the original vision will begin to warp to a different conclusion than intended. The upcoming events will be very SIMILAR to the vision I had until yesterday, but I think my ideas will be pushed to the limits haha. The conclusion itself will be written differently, too.

    I'm saying this because... well... if it wasn't for you (once again), my ideas would never have gotten so far to begin with. And now that I'm about to alter the remainder of the novel, I felt that I just needed to acknowledge that your feedback was what lead to the original vision of the novel.

    And if it wasn't for your feedbacks, I wouldn't have gotten this far--and I wouldn't have thought that it was necessary to evolve the novel even further. But here I am--now it's become necessary to push even further. So the remainder will also be thanks to you.

    Things are a bit more interesting for me because of this, though. I really think that this contest does push my story to its limits--always keeps ME on my toes, too haha

    But yeah. :honey_dealwithit: let's see how things play out from here. The themes of the novel haven't changed, but I think there will be an additional flavor in the novel from now on. Which is nervous yet exciting to me! I wonder how the novel is going to look as a whole, looking at the first and the second parts...?

    Yeah, I think this chapter specifically is where the story officially splits into two. Kinda.

    Hehe. Now I'm a bit excited.

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