Han Quixote

Han Quixote

registered at: Nov 28, 2024
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    May 03, 2025

    To:Orionless

    Just to be clear for passerby, this is a standalone story. Haha.

    Yeah, like I mentioned somewhere else, I think something that is missing with the "other novel" is a proper look at solitude. It discusses solitude and the effects of solitude, but the characters eventually find one another. I think that's a dilemma with a lot of novels that try to get really into "true solitude" because it's hard to have a "plot-plot" when there's only a single character.

    This will be my attempt at a story with a single character from a first-person POV. And the story will be... well, I'm sure there will be some kind of overall theme that is uncovered as the story progresses, but there probably isn't going to be a "solution" reached here. If there is a solution/conclusion, it will probably, with very little doubt, either end in complete insanity or with the power of friendship. But I don't like either one of those ends, so it'll probably end in a really strange way. Or maybe Noel will actually go insane, who knows. :honey_lol:

    But I think the synopsis kinda hints at what the general structure of these chapters will be. And it's not supposed to be depressing or insane, it's just supposed to be about a guy who is "actually alone" with his thoughts.

    And the metaphors... I think that's something I stopped myself from doing when writing other works because the point of those stories were to effectively communicate the idea to the reader and keep the flow going, but here, I just wanted to describe things in a special way that only I would. In that sense, I had a lot of fun writing this. And honestly, it made me feel a strange kind of peace as I ended the piece.

    Still, I want to keep Noel a few meters away from myself so I don't end up just writing about my own life. So writing Noel will be interesting.

    And haha, yeah, I guess it's like a Ted talk. To me it kinda reminds me of Sam Sulek's "car talks", except Noel is just going to talk about whatever he wants to according to the environment he finds himself in and/or what he thinks of in that moment.

    And the weekly interval should give me enough time to live life, I think. Get new experiences, return to studying, etc. I already have a mental backlog of things I can write about here (I wrote something else for this story too, but it didn't exactly fit the story. At least not just yet. Maybe it'll never be used, maybe it will. Dunno), but I don't want to rush into it. I want to decorate!!! It was so fun to try and paint what I was thinking.

    But yeah. I don't know, for this one, I'm probably just going to go with the flow (but also give myself time to think and let ideas simmer instead of going "oh shoot, new idea, gotta write" every two seconds like I did during the contest).

    :honey_starry:

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    Noel
    Chapter:1




    May 03, 2025

    To:Orionless

    Eh.......... it's free until it's not.

    I feel like if we actually end up treating this comment section like a chatroom, someone from HoneyFeed is genuinely just going to make a limit on how much someone can comment on a particular chapter :honey_lol: like how YouTube prevents replies after ~500 replies. Or better yet, limit the amount of characters that you can use in a comment (that'd be a crazy way to limit me from writing an essay each time I enter a new novel hahaha but I would kinda understand if they did)

    And I do think it might be different if you were commenting somewhere else, haha. I kinda treat my novel's comment section as a place I can just sit and discuss the things in the novel, but not everyone wants that, you know? Which is fine. But I'm okay with it here (but again, I feel like HoneyFeed will eventually try to stop comment sections from turning into whatever we have accidentally created on here :honey_lol: Or maybe in reverse, they will like it, I don't know).

    I mean to be fair, when I go to manga sites like Viz, the comment sections are full of short comments but also occasional essays, and sometimes even a full on debate (people talking about Beast Gohan vs UI Goku hahahaha)

    So I think this is kinda fine...? I don't know.

    Still, I feel honored that you miss this novel, haha. It helps me to remember that this novel was supposed to be my thesis on death, morality, and etc. That it meant something.

    I'm still unsure how other people would react to the story if they managed to read it from beginning to end, so I don't know how effective my writing actually is, but I should be glad that I got to finish it haha. If ANYTHING, I now understand the power of a single butterfly.

    It's still crazy to me that this all began because you managed to read not one but two chapters of my story, haha. And then you came back after I told you I've revised the story.

    It's really interesting because that was supposed to be one of the cores of this novel: a single person and a single action could change everything.

    Julian Everhart was supposed to personify that. I still think he does, but it takes a little bit of awareness to realize that a great amount of the story hinges on his choices. And he doesn't even know who Atlas really is!

    I think that message slightly got weakened due to the reversal near part 2 (which changed the direction of the story), but still, without Julian, Atlas would not have bought enough time for Victor to get his happy ending.

    Obviously Julian doesn't hold the story together (I honestly think that role goes to a certain swordswoman if you REALLY think about it), but every small choice he made inadvertently led to the three endings at the tenth part of the story.

    But yeah, you kinda did the same thing for my story. You waltzed in and left two short comments that started everything.

    So nowadays, I'm a believer in the butterfly effect. I guess, to me as a "writer", that was an important takeaway.

    Would you look at that, another essay caused by you mentioning "free will" and that you miss "Mr. Atlas"...

    I mean, at least my essays generally deal with the story at hand :honey_lol:

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    Mr. Atlas Cover 4
    Mr. Atlas
    Chapter:51



    May 02, 2025

    Well, let me first really clarify that this is a good story. There's a good premise, the two protagonists are cool (I can tell they are excellent foils to each other), and it really feels like... to give a comparison of the vibe, it kinda feels like "Papers, Please"? If that makes sense? Like Hachi is just here doing his job and then he gets strange costumers who want to do literally anything other than focus on the coffee. It feels like a video game!

    Honestly, I kinda get Hachi's annoyance. He might have a better time talking to them if they actually acknowledged his coffee first and THEN started talking about depressing things (or in Clara's case... talk about pockets).

    So while keeping in mind that this is a good story... I do want to bring some additional stuff up. I'm not sure if you're comfortable with me pointing things out, but you can let me know if you don't want specific feedback. Or you can just leave the writing as it is. I wouldn't be offended.

    I think "It just does okay." should probably be "It just does, okay?" Because "it just does okay" sounds almost like you're saying the performance of "it" is just doing "okay", like "fine". Obviously I know what you meant, but yeah... I already feel like a jerk pointing this out :bee_sweat:

    And this is even more up to you, but between the paragraph Clara offers the man a solution and the man goes "Thank you, thank you...", I felt like there should have been a little more something from the man that really showed how much her answer affected him. Like, to me, it felt like Clara said the solution and the man immediately just went "thank you", you know? Like there wasn't an explicit "aha!" moment for the man before he showed his gratitude to Clara for resolving his dilemma on life and death...

    But yeah. I love the premise and the story! I can imagine the scenes pretty well, and Hachi's "apathy" and Clara's "naivety" stops the story from being bleak, despite the fact that the chapter literally discusses suicide. And I like the quiet video gamey, "visual novely" mood (at least that's what it feels like to me).

    Good :bee_thumbs:

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    So what if the world is ending around me? I just want to make coffee. Is that so much to ask?
    Chapter:2